Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря на эту тему, вам нужно: 1) дать прямой, грамматически правильный топик-предложение; 2) исправить времена и формы глаголов; 3) избегать лишних слов и дублирования. Конкретно: замените «as all of kids» на «like most children» или «like many children», используйте прошедшее время правильно (I had a bike; I often rode my bike), и сохраните ответ коротким — не более 3–4 предложений. Добавьте одно конкретное уточнение (например, где вы ездили или с кем) и свяжите идеи простым связующим словом (for example / often).

例: Yes, like many children, I had a bike when I was young. I often rode it with my friends around the neighborhood, and we sometimes raced each other for fun.

提案: В этом ответе нужно: 1) начинать с чёткого мнения (Yes/No/Partly); 2) использовать полные предложения и правильную лексику (e.g., "along the roads" или "on the streets" вместо "besides the roads"); 3) дать конкретную причину и пример. Избегайте незаконченых фраз. Используйте связки (for example / because / therefore).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among children and students, because many people prefer them for short trips. For example, I often see kids riding and racing their bikes on the streets near my house.

× Yes, actually as all of kids, I had a bike when I was a child and I always ride rode a bike with my friends

✓ Yes, actually like all kids, I had a bike when I was a child and I always rode a bike with my friends

The sentence has multiple issues: 'as all of kids' is incorrect; use 'like all kids' or 'as all children' for comparison. 'I always ride rode a bike' mixes present and past tenses; the context is past, so use past tense 'rode'. Also omit 'a bike' after 'rode' if repeating is unnecessary, but keeping it is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'like all kids' and keep verbs consistent in past tense: 'I had a bike... and I always rode it with my friends.'

× Initially yes, because I always see children who ride bikes and try to race each other besides the roads and

✓ Initially, yes, because I used to see children who rode bikes and tried to race each other beside the roads.

The answer refers to a past or habitual situation, so present simple 'I always see' is inappropriate; use 'I used to see' or past simple 'I saw'. Also maintain past tense for the verbs describing their actions: 'rode' and 'tried'. 'Besides the roads' is awkward; 'beside the roads' or 'along the roads' is better. The sentence was also incomplete (ended with 'and'); ensure it is finished. Suggestion: 'Initially, yes, because I used to see children who rode bikes and tried to race each other along the roads.'