Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Работайте над грамматикой времени и устранением повторов и пауз. В ответах на вопросы о прошлом используйте прошедшие формы (например, "I had", "it was"). Удалите заполнители («uh», «um») и сократите повторы, чтобы ответ был более связным. Добавляйте одну-две конкретные детали с плавными связующими словами (например, "so", "because", "then"). Также старайтесь не превышать 4–5 предложений и начинайте с прямого ответа на вопрос.

例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was a child. It had training wheels, and I used them for a long time because I was afraid of falling. After some practice with my parents, I gradually learned to balance and then I removed the training wheels. That experience made me more confident about riding on my own.

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на точности слов и связности. Избегайте заполнителей и исправляйте неправильные слова (например, "maneuverable", не "maneuverous"; «con con» — непонятно). Начните с чёткого утверждения, затем поясните причину и приведите конкретный пример, используя связки (например, "because", "for example", "so"). Старайтесь дать 2–3 предложения с конкретикой о том, как и почему люди используют велосипеды.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and commuting because they are cheap and easy to park. For example, I ride a small road bike to work most days because it is lightweight and very maneuverable in city traffic.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was young, it was a small red bike with training wheels uh.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was young; it was a small red bike with training wheels.

The student mixes present tense 'have' with past time marker 'when I was young'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or period to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past events and separate independent clauses properly.

× I have been riding with this wheels for a long time because I was nervous uh uh, whether I can uh ride without them or not uh and I have some hesitancy.

✓ I rode with those wheels for a long time because I was nervous about whether I could ride without them, and I was hesitant.

Several issues: 'have been riding' (present perfect continuous) conflicts with the past context; use simple past 'rode'. 'this wheels' is incorrect determiner and number; use 'those wheels'. 'nervous about whether I can' should be past 'could' to match past context. 'have some hesitancy' is unnatural; use 'was hesitant'. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently, use correct determiners ('those'), and prefer natural adjective 'hesitant'.

× Yes. I think bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes. I think bikes are very popular in my country.

Sentence is correct; present simple 'think' is appropriate for a general opinion about current popularity. No change needed.

× I personally have a bike as well.

✓ I personally have a bike as well.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'A bike' is singular and matches the verb 'have'. No change needed.

× This is a small uh road bike, very good for the city because it's small and it's very maneuverous and uh.

✓ It is a small road bike, very good for the city because it's small and very maneuverable.

Use 'it is' instead of 'this is' for referring to the speaker's bike in this context; both are acceptable but 'it is' sounds more natural. 'maneuverous' is nonstandard; the correct adjective is 'maneuverable'. Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'it's small and it's'. Suggestion: Use standard adjective 'maneuverable' and avoid filler words.

× I usually go to work by this bike it's very con con.

✓ I usually go to work by bike; it's very convenient.

The original has a run-on sentence (comma splice) and a broken word 'con con'. Use 'by bike' rather than 'by this bike' for natural phrasing. Replace 'con con' with 'convenient'. Join clauses with a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: Avoid run-on sentences and unclear repetitions; use complete words.