Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Снизьте количество заполнителей («umm») и завершайте предложения ясно. Дайте короткое тематическое предложение, затем одно-два конкретных дополнительных факта с логической связкой. Уточните завершение мысли (например, что вы делали после школы) и используйте разнообразную лексику вместо повторяющегося «used to».

例: Yes, I had a blue bike when I was a child. I often rode it to school with my classmates, and after school I would cycle to the park to play football with them.

提案: Используйте логичную структуру: краткий ответ, затем поддерживающее объяснение с конкретными причинами или примерами. Избегайте неуместных слов и грамматических ошибок (например, «wrote it» непонятно). Постройте связное предложение с подходящими связками (e.g., «because», «for example»).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or public transport. For example, a few weeks ago my husband and his friends tried riding bikes for fun and said it was more of a leisure activity than a common way to commute.

× I used to umm, ride to school on it with my classmates and after school I used to.

✓ I used to, umm, ride to school on it with my classmates, and after school I used to ride it.

The sentence omits the verb after 'used to' at the end, causing a verb form error. In English, 'used to' must be followed by the base form of a verb. Repeat the verb 'ride' to complete the clause. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity.

× No, I don't think so. But some weeks ago my husband wrote it with his friends and they found it really funny and school and sporty.

✓ No, I don't think so. But some weeks ago my husband rode it with his friends, and they found it really fun and sporty.

The original uses 'wrote' instead of the correct verb 'rode' (likely a pronunciation/listening error) and 'it' is acceptable referring to the bike. 'Funny' is not the best collocate for an activity; 'fun' is the correct adjective. Also the fragment 'and school' is ungrammatical and likely unintended; remove it. Use the past tense 'rode' to match the time reference 'some weeks ago'.