Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and pronunciation of key verbs, correct vocabulary (assistant → training; write → ride), use past tense consistently, and make the answer more concise and natural. Include a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small bike with training wheels when I was little, and when I turned seven my father removed them. After that, I practiced riding on the sidewalk until I felt confident enough to ride on the road.

提案: Make sentences smoother and more precise: correct small errors (ride bikes to the metro station), avoid filler words (Umm), and use a linking word to connect reasons. Add one specific example or brief comparison to strengthen the response. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. For example, as a student I often ride my bike to the metro station and then take the train to school. They are convenient and cheap, so many people prefer them for short trips.

× I had a bike with assistant wheels when I was little and when I turn 7 my father took away the assistant wheels.

✓ I had a bike with assistant wheels when I was little, and when I turned 7 my father took them off.

The verb 'turn' should be in the past tense 'turned' to match the past timeframe 'I had' and 'my father took'. Also 'took away the assistant wheels' is awkward; 'took them off' is more natural. Use consistent past tense for actions that happened in the past.

× So then I tried to write the bike by my own self.

✓ So then I tried to ride the bike by myself.

The verb should be 'ride' (not 'write') and 'by myself' is the correct reflexive phrase. 'Tried to ride' uses the infinitive after 'tried', not a gerund. Also 'my own self' is redundant; use 'myself.'

× As a student I often ride bikes to metro station and then go to school.

✓ As a student, I often ride my bike to the metro station and then go to school.

Add the possessive 'my' because someone rides their own bike. Include the article 'the' before 'metro station' for a specific location. 'Bikes' can be singular 'my bike' for this personal habit; leaving plural is possible but less natural here.

× Umm. In my opinion bikes are more convenient and it does not cost much, so people ride bikes really often.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are more convenient and do not cost much, so people ride them very often.

Subject-verb agreement: 'bikes' is plural, so use 'do not' instead of 'does not.' Replace 'it' with 'they' or 'them' to agree with plural 'bikes.' 'Really often' is informal; 'very often' is a better collocation. Also remove filler 'Umm.' and add commas for clarity.