Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, avoid hesitation and small errors, and add one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Keep answers natural and within five sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add a reason or a short memory using linking words like "because" or "so". Also correct minor grammar: say "go anywhere on foot" instead of "by walk."

例: No, I didn't. I usually went everywhere on foot because my family lived nearby and walking was enjoyable. For instance, I often walked to school and the park, which helped me stay active.

提案: Be concise and use precise vocabulary; avoid awkward phrasing like "this kind of devices." Provide one or two specific reasons or examples and use linking words such as "because" or "for example." Also use collocations: "affordable and cheap to operate" or "cost-effective."

例: Yes, I do. Because living costs have risen, many people choose bicycles or motorcycles as they are more affordable and cheaper to operate. For example, students and delivery workers often use motorcycles to save on fuel and parking fees.

× As I remember, I used to go anywhere by walk because it's very, uh, enjoyable for me.

✓ As I remember, I used to go everywhere on foot because it was very enjoyable for me.

The phrase 'go anywhere by walk' is ungrammatical. Use 'go everywhere' (more natural than 'anywhere' here) and the correct collocation is 'on foot' not 'by walk'. Also tense consistency: the question refers to childhood, so past tense 'was' fits 'enjoyable for me'. Suggestion: learn common collocations for modes of transport (on foot, by car, by bike).

× because this kind of devices are more affordable and cheaper to run.

✓ because this kind of device is more affordable and cheaper to run.

There is a mismatch between 'this kind of' (singular) and 'devices' (plural). With 'this kind of' use a singular noun ('device'), and the verb should agree: 'is' not 'are'. Alternatively, use 'these kinds of devices are' if plural is intended. Suggestion: match singular/plural in phrases like 'this kind of' vs 'these kinds of'.

× more affordable and cheaper to run.

✓ more affordable to run.

The words 'more affordable' and 'cheaper' are redundant when used together. Use one comparative expression: 'more affordable' or 'cheaper to run'. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same idea with synonyms; choose one clear comparative form.