Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation noises (uh) and repetitive statements. Use consistent tense and correct grammar (e.g., 'It was green' not 'it is').

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was green and had a basket on the front, which made it easy to carry my books. I rode it almost every day to school and to tuition classes, so it was very useful.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then explain with specific reasons and a brief comparison. Use linking words like 'however' and 'nowadays' correctly. Correct grammar and word order (e.g., 'people used them' not 'used by'). Avoid filler words and speak in full sentences.

例: Yes, they used to be very popular. However, nowadays many people prefer motorcycles because they are faster and more convenient for longer distances. Still, bikes remain common among students and in rural areas because they are cheap and easy to maintain.

× I got a bike that I really like It is like it is uh green color and it has a basket in front of the bike.

✓ I got a bike that I really like. It is green and it has a basket on the front of the bike.

Errors: missing period between clauses; incorrect article/phrase 'green color' (unnatural here) and preposition 'in front of the bike'. Correction: add proper sentence boundary, use 'green' as adjective rather than 'green color', and use 'on the front' (or 'on the front of the bike') for location. Suggestion: separate sentences properly, use simple adjective 'green', and use correct preposition 'on' for placement on an object.

× I use it for almost every day for many reasons like uh, when I go to school on shopping or tuition, I really use it.

✓ I use it almost every day for many reasons, for example when I go to school, shopping, or tuition; I really use it a lot.

Errors: unnecessary 'for' before 'almost every day' and awkward word order 'go to school on shopping'; repetition 'I really use it'. Correction: place 'almost every day' correctly after 'use it', use 'for example' to introduce reasons, list activities with commas and parallel structure ('go to school, shopping, or tuition'), and add 'a lot' for emphasis. Suggestion: keep adverb placement close to the verb, use parallel gerund/noun forms for lists, and avoid extra filler words.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

No change needed: 'bikes' as plural is correct for asking about general popularity. Keep plural noun to refer to the category.

× I yes, uh, but nowadays, uh, people usually use motorcycle, then buys bikes, but uh, when we were here, bikes are really popular and almost pretty much all of the people in our country used by.

✓ Yes, but nowadays people usually use motorcycles instead of bikes. When we were younger, bikes were very popular and almost everyone in our country used them.

Multiple errors: unnecessary 'I' before 'yes'; 'motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles'; incorrect verb 'then buys' should be 'instead of bikes' or 'rather than bikes'; tense inconsistency and wrong pronoun 'used by' instead of 'used them'. Correction: remove filler, use plural nouns to match 'people', use 'instead of' to contrast, change past-tense pair 'were' for 'were younger' and 'were very popular', and use object pronoun 'them'. Suggestion: simplify filler words, ensure noun plurality matches subject, use correct contrast phrases, and use correct object pronouns.