Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "ride on a bicycle" → "ride a bicycle") and correct tense/word form ("I riding" → "I rode").

例: Yes, I had my own bicycle as a child. I started riding when I was four, and I rode regularly until I was about twenty, so cycling became part of my daily routine.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason or example using linking words. Correct grammatical errors ("bicycle is" → "bicycles are"; "transportation way" → "means of transport") and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, absolutely — bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short trips to work or school because they are cheap and convenient, especially in crowded cities.

× I started to ride on a bicycle when I was four years old and until I became 20 years old, I riding a bicycle was one of my daily routines.

✓ I started riding a bicycle when I was four years old, and until I turned twenty, riding a bicycle was one of my daily routines.

Two problems: tense/form and word choice. Use 'started riding' rather than 'started to ride on' for natural English (verb + -ing after 'start' is common). Replace 'became 20 years old' with 'turned twenty' and remove awkward clause order. Also change 'I riding a bicycle was' to 'riding a bicycle was' to correct sentence structure and avoid a missing auxiliary; this fixes past tense consistency and sentence structure. Suggestion: Use 'started + -ing' or 'started to + base verb' consistently, keep subject and verb clear, and use 'turned' for ages.

× From children to old people, bicycle is one of the most common transportation way most common transportation in my country.

✓ From children to elderly people, bicycles are one of the most common modes of transportation in my country.

Multiple issues: noun number and article usage plus word choice. 'Bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' and require plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'Old people' is better phrased as 'elderly people'. 'Transportation way' is incorrect; use 'mode of transportation'. Also remove the duplicated phrase 'most common transportation'. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number (plural noun uses plural verb), choose idiomatic phrases like 'modes of transportation', and avoid repetition.