Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the tense and make the reply more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail if needed. For example, use simple past tense for past experiences and avoid unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that I rode around my neighborhood almost every day when I was seven.

提案: Make the response more coherent by using linking words and specific examples. Use plural/singular correctly and keep sentences concise (max 4–5 sentences). Mention why they are popular and give one specific benefit or example.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes because they are cheaper and faster in traffic. For instance, cyclists often use dedicated bike lanes in the city, which also helps improve fitness and reduce pollution.

× Of course I have a bike when I'm a child.

✓ Of course I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student's reply must use past tense. 'Have' and 'I'm' are present tense; they should be 'had' and 'was' respectively. Use past simple for completed states in the past: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, there are so many bikes in the road in my country and I think it's a good way to replace the car or the public transportation and ride bike.

✓ Yes, there are so many bikes on the roads in my country, and I think they are a good alternative to cars or public transportation, and riding a bike

Use the preposition 'on' with 'roads' rather than 'in the road.' 'Roads' (plural) is more natural here. 'Replace the car or the public transportation' is awkward: use 'alternative to cars or public transportation.' Also use the gerund/noun form 'riding a bike' not 'ride bike.' Ensure agreement: 'they are' refers to 'bikes.' Split into clearer phrases and use articles appropriately.

× It can improve my health.

✓ It can improve your health.

The student speaks generally about riding bikes as a practice in their country. To match the general statement, use 'your health' or 'one's health' rather than 'my health.' If the student intends to speak about themselves, keep present reference: 'It can improve my health' is grammatically possible but sounds inconsistent after general claims. For a general statement, use 'your' or 'one's.' Additionally, context suggests general benefit, so 'your health' is clearer.