Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and reorganize your response: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (age, who taught you, memorable moment). Use correct tense and simple vocabulary, avoid redundant phrases, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example, say your exact age when you got the bike, who helped you learn, and one brief detail about where you practiced. Also correct grammar errors (e.g., 'every children' → 'every child' or remove it; 'I do have a boy' is incorrect) and avoid confusing words like 'torch' if you meant 'training wheels' or 'brother rode me' → 'my brother pushed me' or 'helped me ride'.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was five, and my brother taught me how to ride it using training wheels. He used to take me around the yard behind our house until I felt confident to ride on my own.

提案: Make a clear opinion statement, then support it with specific reasons and a short comparison. Use simple, correct sentence structures and chronological markers (e.g., 'in the past', 'now'). Avoid contradictory or unclear phrases like 'this is the second popular motorbike' and remove filler words ('uh'). For example, state whether bicycles are still common, explain that motorbikes became dominant in recent decades, and mention one reason (cost, convenience, or infrastructure). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Bicycles used to be very popular in my country, especially about twenty years ago. Now motorbikes are more common because they are faster and more convenient for long distances, but many people still use bikes for short trips or recreation.

× Alright, every children like every child.

✓ Alright, every child likes it.

The noun 'children' is plural while 'every' requires a singular noun. Also subject-verb agreement: with singular 'every child' the verb should be 'likes'. Suggestion: use 'every child' or 'all children' and match the verb accordingly.

× I do have a boy when I was five years old and I wore torch to ride a bike by my brother.

✓ I had a bike when I was five years old and I learned to ride it from my brother.

The original mixes present tense 'do have' with past time 'when I was five', causing tense inconsistency. Use simple past 'had' for past events. 'Wore torch' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'used a torch' or 'learned to ride' — revised to 'learned to ride it from my brother' for clarity.

× He rode me around the chart of my house.

✓ He rode with me around the courtyard of my house.

Preposition and noun choice are incorrect: 'rode me' is wrong; use 'rode with me' or 'pushed me'. 'Chart' is incorrect word — likely 'yard' or 'courtyard'. Correct preposition 'around' kept; use 'around the courtyard' for location.

× Yes, of course it's popular maybe in 20 years ago right now the motorbike is more popular, but it's maybe this is the second popular motorbike.

✓ Yes, bikes were popular maybe 20 years ago, but now motorbikes are more popular; bicycles are perhaps the second most popular vehicle.

Original mixes time references and tenses incorrectly. 'Maybe in 20 years ago' is ungrammatical; use '20 years ago'. Use past tense 'were' for that time. For present, 'now motorbikes are more popular' uses simple present. Also correct comparative phrasing: 'second most popular' instead of 'second popular'.

× No uh vehicle in my country.

✓ There are no other vehicles like this in my country.

Sentence lacks a verb and clear structure. Adding 'There are' fixes 'there be' and provides subject. Clarified meaning by adding 'other' and 'like this' to connect to previous sentence.