Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (use correct past tense and articles), be more concise and structure the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to avoid repetition (e.g., "but", "so"). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child, but my cousin did. I often borrowed his bike, so we explored nearby parks and streets together. Those rides were a fun way to spend afternoons and learn to balance.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Avoid repeating "but" too often and correct small phrasing errors (e.g., "not much popular" → "not very popular"). Provide one concrete example or comparison to strengthen the point.

例: Bikes used to be popular, but now motorbikes are more common in my country. For example, many people prefer motorbikes because they are faster for commuting. However, I believe bicycles should be encouraged because they reduce pollution and improve fitness.

× Well I didn't had bike when I was a child but my cousins, my cousin used to have a bike so I used to ride his bike and we used to go to different places riding bikes.

✓ Well, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my cousin used to have a bike, so I used to ride his bike and we used to go to different places riding bikes.

The error is using 'didn't had' after the auxiliary 'did'. In English, after the past auxiliary 'did' the main verb must be in the base form. Change 'didn't had' to 'didn't have'. Also minor punctuation and singular/plural consistency: 'my cousins, my cousin' was redundant and unclear, so 'my cousin' is used to match 'his bike' later. Suggestions: Use 'didn't' + base verb for negative past statements and keep noun references consistent.

× It used to be popular but it's not much popular nowadays.

✓ It used to be popular, but it's not very popular nowadays.

The phrase 'not much popular' is ungrammatical in present tense adjective modification. Use 'not very popular' or 'not as popular' to modify the adjective 'popular'. Also keep comma before coordinating conjunction joining clauses. Suggestion: Use 'very' or 'so' to modify adjectives (not 'much' with 'popular').

× But instead of bikes, motorbikes are more popular.

✓ However, motorbikes are more popular than bicycles.

The original sentence is understandable but awkwardly starts with 'But instead of bikes', which confuses the comparison. A clearer structure is 'motorbikes are more popular than bicycles' or 'motorbikes are more popular than bikes'. Suggestion: Use explicit comparative structure 'more... than...' for clarity and avoid starting sentences with contradictory conjunctions unnecessarily.

× But I think bikes should be popular as well because it just is good for environment and also good for our health.

✓ But I think bikes should be popular as well because they are good for the environment and for our health.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes'; use plural pronoun 'they'. Also 'just is' is unnatural; use 'are' and include articles: 'the environment'. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to the noun and use definite article 'the environment'. Use parallel structure 'good for the environment and for our health.'