Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify grammar and use a clear structure: start with a topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct past tense (use "had" and "was" consistently), replace fillers (uh, umm) with brief pauses, and use correct vocabulary for parts (wheels, not wells). Limit to 2–4 sentences to stay natural and concise.

例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was about seven years old. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and it had two large wheels plus two small training wheels to help me learn. I used to ride it around my neighborhood almost every day.

提案: Be more precise and add one specific reason or example using linking words. Avoid repetition ("sharing bikes, public sharing bikes") and reduce fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a supporting detail or brief reason (e.g., convenience, low cost), and finish with a short example or location.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In particular, dockless bike-sharing services are common because they are cheap and convenient, so you often find bikes parked near bus stops and subway entrances. For example, on my way to work I usually see dozens of bikes around the local subway station.

× Yes, of course I have a little bike when I was around uh, seven years old umm, it was a bag from my father.

✓ Yes, of course I had a little bike when I was around seven years old. It was a gift from my father.

The student used present tense 'have' for a past situation; this is a past tense issue. Also 'bag' is likely a word choice error but that is outside the provided list; corrected to 'gift'. Use 'had' to match the past time reference 'when I was around seven years old'. Split into two sentences for clarity and to correct 'it was a bag' to 'It was a gift'. Suggestions: use past simple for completed past events (I had, he bought).

× He bought it for me uh, actually it has to uh four wells, two big ones and two.

✓ He bought it for me. Actually, it had four wheels: two big ones and two small ones.

Original mixes past and present and contains incorrect words; 'has' should be past 'had' to describe a past object (past tense issue). Also 'wells' is a mispronunciation of 'wheels' and omitted 'small' for the smaller wheels; corrected to 'had four wheels' to match the past context. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past simple when describing characteristics of something owned in the past.

× Yes, of course. Actually there are many sharing bikes, public sharing bikes.

✓ Yes, of course. Actually, there are many shared bikes, public shared bikes.

The student used 'sharing bikes' which is an awkward present participle usage; this fits present tense/verb form issue. Use 'shared bikes' or 'bike-sharing services' to describe the current state. Suggestion: use adjective 'shared' or the compound noun 'bike-sharing' to describe the service in present contexts.

× I mean uh, in the city umm, you can see it everywhere, especially umm, around the corner of the bus station or uh, subway station.

✓ I mean, in the city you can see them everywhere, especially around the bus stations or subway stations.

Pronoun 'it' refers to plural 'bikes' but is singular (incorrect pronoun/pronominal reference) and preposition 'around the corner of the bus station' is awkward. This falls under incorrect use of prepositions and also subject-pronoun agreement (but per instructions only listed type used). Replaced 'it' with plural 'them' and used plural for locations. Use 'around bus stations' or 'near bus or subway stations' for natural preposition use. Suggestion: match pronouns to noun number and use 'around' or 'near' plus plural locations when speaking generally.