Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning, correct grammar and use coherent sequencing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use past tense consistently and choose correct verbs (e.g., “rode” not “rob”). Keep answers natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around our garden and practiced balancing. Once I fell off, hit a stone and badly chipped a tooth, so my parents made me wear a helmet after that.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then support it with specific observations using linking words (for example, “because” or “however”). Avoid fragments and vague phrases. Use clear comparative or frequency language (e.g., “rarely,” “many people”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because I rarely see people cycling on the streets. Instead, most people travel by car or use public transport, especially in big cities.

× Yes, I often rob my bike around our garden.

✓ Yes, I often rode my bike around our garden.

The student used 'rob' (present tense verb meaning steal) incorrectly. The intended action in the past requires the past tense of 'ride', which is 'rode' (past simple). Use 'rode' to match the past time reference 'when you were a child'. Suggestion: Replace 'rob' with 'rode' and ensure past tense verbs for past time frames.

× When I was child.

✓ When I was a child.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. Also the fragment lacks connection to the surrounding clause. Use the full phrase 'When I was a child' as an introductory clause and attach it to a main clause. Suggestion: Add 'a' and combine with the main sentence or punctuate properly.

× I remember once I fell off from the bicycle and got knocked on the stone.

✓ I remember once I fell off the bicycle and hit my head on a stone.

Several issues: 'fell off from' is incorrect — use 'fell off' with no 'from'. 'The bicycle' can be 'the' but 'a bicycle' is also acceptable; 'got knocked on the stone' is unidiomatic. Use 'hit my head on a stone' or 'was knocked into a stone' to express impact. Also 'got knocked on' is not correct passive phrasing here. Suggestion: Use 'fell off the bicycle' and a natural expression such as 'hit my head on a stone'.

× Then my teeth just broke it.

✓ Then my teeth just broke.

The original has incorrect object 'it' and unnatural phrasing. Teeth do not 'break it'; instead say 'my teeth broke' meaning they were broken, or more naturally 'some of my teeth broke' or 'I broke a tooth.' Ensure pronoun/object matches the verb and intended meaning. Suggestion: Use 'my teeth broke' or 'I broke a tooth' depending on intended meaning.

× I think it's not that well known because I rarely see people riding on the street instead of.

✓ I think bicycles are not that well known because I rarely see people riding them on the street.

The phrase 'it's not that well known' is vague (what is 'it'?). Replace 'it' with 'bicycles' to be clear. 'Riding on the street instead of' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'riding them on the street' to refer back to bicycles. Tense 'I think' is present — keep present simple. Suggestion: Replace 'it' with the noun and complete the clause referring to that noun.

× I'm mostly say them.

✓ I mostly see them.

'I'm mostly say them' mixes present continuous with wrong verb 'say' instead of 'see'. The intended meaning is to perceive people riding, so use 'I mostly see them.' Also present simple 'I mostly see' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'see' and appropriate tense/form.

× I mostly see the people doing other activities instead of.

✓ I mostly see people doing other activities instead.

The phrase 'instead of' requires an object (instead of what?). Ending the sentence with 'instead' is sufficient to mean 'instead of riding bicycles.' Also 'the people' is unnecessarily specific; 'people' is better. Use 'doing other activities instead' for clarity. Suggestion: Remove 'the' and change 'instead of' to 'instead' or complete the comparison explicitly (e.g., 'instead of riding bikes').