Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct key vocabulary (bike, not bite), use simple past for past ownership, and reduce repetition. Link sentences with connectors (but, so) and give one specific detail about why you no longer have a bike. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bicycle when I was about seven or eight. However, I don't have one now because I live in an apartment with no storage space and the building has limited outdoor area. So I stopped keeping a bike and usually walk or use public transport.

提案: Focus on accurate grammar, clearer structure and specific examples. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then support with 1–2 specific reasons or examples (commuting, affordability). Use correct continuous/simple forms and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Vietnam because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students ride bikes to school and adults often cycle to local markets or workplaces. In larger cities motorcycles are common too, but bicycles remain an important traditional mode of transport.

× Yes, I used to get a bite when like I was 7 or 8, but I'm living now, I'm living in apartment.

✓ Yes, I used to get a bike when I was about 7 or 8, but now I live in an apartment.

The student used 'get a bite' (wrong word) and mixed tenses/continuous form incorrectly. 'Used to' indicates a past habitual action and should be followed by the base verb 'get' or better 'have/get a bike'; 'I'm living now, I'm living in apartment' is awkward: use simple present 'I live in an apartment' to describe current permanent situation. Also 'a' is needed before 'bike' and 'an' before 'apartment'. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and simple present for current facts; choose correct vocabulary ('bike' not 'bite').

× There's there's no space in the playgrounds.

✓ There is no space in the playgrounds.

The sentence contained a repeated contraction 'There's there's'. Use a single 'There is' to state existence. 'There is' correctly introduces the existence of 'no space'. Suggestion: omit duplication and keep one 'There is'.

× So now I don't, I don't have any bike now, so yeah.

✓ So now I don't have a bike.

The sentence repeats phrases and uses 'any bike' which is unnatural; with singular countable nouns use the indefinite article 'a'. The repeated 'now' and 'so yeah' are unnecessary. Suggestion: use concise simple present negative 'I don't have a bike' to state current fact and include 'a' before singular countable noun.

× Yes, I'm from Vietnam, so bike is very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I'm from Vietnam, so bikes are very popular in my country.

The subject 'bike' refers generally to the category and should be plural 'bikes' with plural verb 'are' when speaking about general popularity. Suggestion: use plural noun for general statements about popularity and match verb agreement.

× People, peoples getting used up.

✓ People are used to them.

Original is ungrammatical: 'peoples' is incorrect in this context and 'getting used up' is wrong phrase. If the student means people are accustomed to bikes, better: 'People are used to them' or 'People are used to riding bikes'. Suggestion: use 'people' (plural) and a correct passive/phrase 'are used to' plus the activity or object.

× People are used to ride bike, to go to school.

✓ People are used to riding bikes to go to school.

After 'used to' meaning accustomed to, the verb should be in -ing form: 'used to riding'. Also use plural 'bikes' and omit the comma. Suggestion: use 'used to' + gerund for habitual activities people are accustomed to.

× I'll go to work and that's a great traditional, yeah.

✓ They go to work and that's a great tradition.

'I'll go to work' (I will) is wrong for a general statement about people; use 'they go to work' or 'people go to work'. 'Traditional' is an adjective; the noun 'tradition' is needed. Suggestion: use plural subject for general habits and correct noun form 'tradition'.