Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, pronunciation, and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense and verb forms, avoid repetition, and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'so'). For example, correct past-tense verbs ('didn't have', 'looked forward', 'allowed'), and fix word choice ('bike' not 'bite').

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I really wanted one, but my parents wouldn’t allow it because they thought it was unsafe. So I often borrowed my classmate’s bike to practice riding on weekends.

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, coherent, and more specific. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use correct tenses for past and present, avoid repetition, and include a reason and one example. Use linking words like 'but' and 'because' correctly.

例: Ten years ago, regular bicycles were very popular in my country. But nowadays electric bikes are more common because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. For example, many people use e-bikes to travel to work without getting sweaty.

× Actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child but I really looking forward to have a bite.

✓ Actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child but I was really looking forward to having a bike.

The sentence mixes past simple with a present participle 'looking' without auxiliary and uses incorrect verb form 'have' and misspells 'bike' as 'bite'. Use past continuous or past progressive with 'was really looking' to match the past timeframe. After 'looking forward to' the gerund form is required, so use 'having'. Also correct the noun to 'bike'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistency and use 'looking forward to' + gerund.

× But my parents always didn't allowed to buy a bike from me so I I'm I usually borrowed my classmates bike to practice.

✓ But my parents never allowed me to buy a bike, so I usually borrowed my classmates' bike to practice.

Several issues: 'always didn't allowed' is incorrect negative word order and tense—use 'never allowed' or 'didn't allow'. 'Allowed' should be base form after 'did' but here simple past 'allowed' with no 'did' is fine when not negated; use 'never allowed' for habitual past. 'to buy a bike from me' is wrong perspective—parents don't buy from their child; use 'allowed me to buy a bike'. Remove extraneous filler 'I I'm I'. Possessive for 'classmates' requires apostrophe: 'classmates\'' bike. Ensure verbs remain in past tense (habitual past): 'usually borrowed'.

× 10 years ago, bike is really a bike was really popular in our country, but now I saw I see it on the electric bike is really popular because it is very convenient.

✓ Ten years ago, bikes were really popular in our country, but now electric bikes are really popular because they are very convenient.

Time reference 'Ten years ago' requires past tense 'were' and plural 'bikes' for general statement. Original contains duplication and tense confusion ('is really a bike was really'). Use plural for general noun. For present contrast 'now' use present simple 'are'. 'Electric bike' should be plural and article removed when speaking generally: 'electric bikes'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'electric bikes'. Also write 'Ten' instead of '10' in formal speech. Suggestion: keep consistent tense for past vs present and match noun number to meaning.