Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and simple vocabulary will make your answer natural and effective.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I played with small toys like bats and balls, so I didn’t need a bicycle. However, I sometimes borrowed one from a neighbor to ride around the street.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words for coherence. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (singular/plural, articles). Include a brief example or comparison to add detail.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people. They are a convenient and affordable way to travel short distances, and many students use them to commute to school. For example, in my city there are dedicated bike lanes which makes cycling safer and more attractive.

× Oh well, I have no bike when I was a child because uh uh, I have all.

✓ Oh well, I had no bike when I was a child because I had only a few things.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' for actions or states in the past. Also 'have all' is unclear; 'had only a few things' is clearer. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for childhood descriptions and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'a few toys').

× I have only uh, some uh, small toys, uh, such as uh, bats, balls and other things, uh so, but cannot uh, have in.

✓ I had only some small toys, such as bats, balls and other things, so I couldn't have a bike.

Plural nouns 'bats, balls' are fine but the sentence uses wrong tense and the phrase 'cannot have in' is ungrammatical. Change to past 'had' and use 'couldn't have a bike' to express inability in the past. Also reorder clauses for clarity: list toys, then contrast with not having a bike.

× Oh yes, of course, our bikes are very popular in my countries, especially in a young generations, uh, first choice or bike because, uh, it's very uh, easy and convenient and also people, people prefer to uh, bike for ride.

✓ Oh yes, of course, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among young people; a bike is often their first choice because it is very easy and convenient, and people prefer to ride bikes.

Multiple article and word-choice errors: 'my countries' should be singular 'my country' when referring to one country; 'a young generations' is incorrect—use 'young people' or 'young generations' (no article) and correct plurality/number. Use 'a bike' as a general singular noun for 'first choice'. 'Prefer to bike for ride' is incorrect collocation; use 'prefer to ride bikes' or 'prefer to bike'. Also fix verb forms ('it's' -> 'it is') and remove repeated word 'people'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural collocation.