Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity, keep answers concise (≤5 sentences), use past tense consistently for childhood events, and add one brief specific detail to support the statement. Link ideas with a simple connector (e.g., "so" or "after that").

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I once borrowed my cousin's bike, but I fell and hurt my knee, so I became afraid of cycling. After that accident, I avoided bikes for several years.

提案: Make the answer slightly more detailed and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, using plural/singular consistency, and adding one specific example or reason. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") to connect ideas and avoid run-on sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see many people cycling in cities because biking is eco-friendly and convenient; for example, commuters use bikes to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× No, I don't have, but I did try to borrow my cousin's bike.

✓ No, I didn't, but I did try to borrow my cousin's bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. The student used present tense 'I don't have', which is inconsistent. Use the past negative 'I didn't' to match the past context. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout the reply when referring to past events.

× But then I fell and that's when I started to have a trauma and I swear to myself that I'll never ride again.

✓ But then I fell, and that's when I developed a trauma, and I swore to myself that I'd never ride again.

Multiple tense and word-choice problems: 'started to have a trauma' is unnatural — use 'developed a trauma' or 'became traumatized.' The sentence mixes present and past: 'that's' (that is) is acceptable as a narrative device, but 'I swear to myself' is present while the event is past; use past 'I swore' to keep tense consistency. 'I'll never ride again' refers to a past vow about future action from that past point; change to 'I'd never ride again' (would) or keep 'I'd' as contraction of 'I would.' Suggestion: keep past narrative consistent and prefer natural collocations like 'became traumatized' or 'was traumatized.'

× Yes because every time I go out I see people using it and it's eco friendly and convenient.

✓ Yes, because every time I go out I see people using them, and they're eco-friendly and convenient.

The student refers to 'bikes' (plural) so the pronoun should be plural 'them' not singular 'it' (singular/plural issue). Also 'it's' should be plural 'they're' to agree with 'bikes.' 'Eco friendly' should be hyphenated as 'eco-friendly' when used as an adjective. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs to the noun number and hyphenate compound adjectives.