Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep sentences short, use correct verb forms and vocabulary related to bikes (bike, bicycle, ride, neighborhood), and avoid unrelated content (e.g., ‘flag’, ‘write’, ‘French’ unless relevant). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was seven. My mother bought it for my birthday and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon. I especially enjoyed exploring the streets near my school because it made me feel independent and happy.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is disfluent and grammatically incorrect. Start with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No + reason), then provide two specific reasons using linking words like “because” and “for example.” Correct grammar (e.g., ‘bicycles are not popular’, ‘traffic congestion’, ‘bike lanes’) and avoid filler sounds. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there is heavy traffic and few safe bike lanes. For example, many roads are crowded with cars and motorcycles, so people prefer motorbikes or cars instead of cycling.

× I did have a flag when I was 7th.

✓ I had a bike when I was seven.

The original mixes auxiliary 'did' with simple past unnecessarily and uses 'flag' and '7th' incorrectly. Use simple past 'had' for a past possession. Write 'seven' instead of '7th' for age and correct 'flag' to 'bike' to match the examiner's question if that was intended; if the student meant 'flag' keep 'flag' but keep the tense: 'I had a flag when I was seven.'

× My mom bought it for my 7th birthday.

✓ My mom bought it for my seventh birthday.

Use words for ages and ordinals in full form in formal sentences: 'seventh' instead of '7th'. No article change needed but write the number as a word for clarity.

× I remember that I would love to write about my neighborhood.

✓ I remember that I loved to write about my neighborhood.

Mixing 'remember' (present) with 'would love' is incorrect for a past habitual action. Use past simple 'loved' or 'would' with clear past habitual: 'I remember that I used to love writing about my neighborhood.' Choose one consistent form.

× It gave me a good mood and also give me French.

✓ It put me in a good mood and also helped me learn French.

Verb forms are inconsistent: 'gave' (past) followed by 'give' (present). Use past forms for past experiences. Also 'give me French' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me learn French' or 'gave me an interest in French.'

× I do not think bicycles or popular in my country because there were though there are a lot of TR umm heavy congestion and there is no delicate bike.

✓ I do not think bicycles are popular in my country because there is a lot of heavy traffic congestion and there are no dedicated bike lanes.

Multiple problems: 'or' should be 'are' (verb) causing subject-verb mismatch; 'there were though there are' mixes tenses and is confusing; 'TR umm' is filler that should be removed; 'delicate bike. Lanes' is fragmented and should be 'dedicated bike lanes.' Use present tense for general statements and correct noun phrases ('heavy traffic congestion', 'dedicated bike lanes').

× and so I don't think it's there for cyclists to ride.

✓ so I don't think it is safe or suitable for cyclists to ride.

The phrase 'it's there for cyclists to ride' is ungrammatical. Use a clear adjective phrase: 'safe' or 'suitable for cyclists' or 'good for cyclists.' Also maintain tense and clarity for general statements.