Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify the timeline, correct grammar, and use linking words to make the answer coherent and natural. Keep sentences concise (max 5). Include one clear topic sentence, then 1–2 supporting details (what happened, and current situation). Avoid awkward phrases like "a ride bike" or "brought a new one" when you mean "bought".

例: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child; it was decorated with golden ribbons. Unfortunately I ruined it in an accident and didn't have another bike for about four years. Recently I bought a new one and I use it often.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give specific supporting reasons and link them logically. Avoid repeating the same idea with different words. Use clearer vocabulary: say "common" or "popular" instead of "frequent". Limit to 3–4 sentences and add one specific example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Georgia. Many people use them for short trips and exercise, and in my town nearly every family owns at least one. For example, my best friend had a very popular bike that everyone admired when we were children.

× Back in my childhood I used to have a ride bike gilded with golden ribbons.

✓ Back in my childhood I used to have a ridden/ride-on bike gilded with golden ribbons.

The phrase 'ride bike' is incorrect word choice and form. Use 'ride-on bike' or 'ridden bike' to describe a bike meant for riding. Also 'used to have' is fine for past habitual. Suggestion: choose 'ride-on bike' for clarity (a toy or child's bike). Replace the incorrect noun phrase to correct collocation.

× However, with an accident I completely destroyed the bike.

✓ However, in an accident I completely destroyed the bike.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect when referring to an event. Use 'in an accident' to indicate something happened during that accident. The past tense 'destroyed' matches the time reference.

× So four years afterwards I didn't have a bike and right now I brought a new one, which I frequently use.

✓ So for four years afterwards I didn't have a bike, and now I have bought a new one, which I frequently use.

Tense and time-expression problems: 'four years afterwards' should be 'for four years afterwards' or 'for four years' to indicate duration. Mixing past 'didn't have' with 'right now I brought' is incorrect; 'brought' is past tense but 'right now' requires present perfect or present: use 'have bought' or 'bought recently' depending on intended meaning. 'Now I have bought a new one' is natural for a recent purchase that I still use.

× Riding a bike is frequent pastime in my country, Georgia.

✓ Riding a bike is a frequent pastime in my country, Georgia.

Missing article 'a' before 'frequent pastime'. In English, singular countable nouns like 'pastime' require an article. Add 'a' to make it grammatical.

× I remember that my best friend had the coolest bike in our town.

✓ I remember that my best friend had the coolest bike in our town.

Sentence is grammatical; adjective 'coolest' is acceptable. No correction needed. Included here for completeness.

× People used to be so jealous of her.

✓ People used to be very jealous of her.

'So jealous' is colloquially acceptable but 'very jealous' is more standard in formal responses. This is stylistic rather than grammatical; grammar is acceptable.

× Everyone had their own bikes and I was an unusual exception.

✓ Everyone had his or her own bike, and I was an unusual exception.

'Everyone' is singular and traditionally takes singular pronouns and noun forms: 'his or her' and singular 'bike'. Alternatively, use plural 'their' with 'bikes' is common in informal speech; keep consistency. Choose one form: formal 'his or her own bike'.

× So depending on that I believe that bikes are frequent in our country.

✓ Based on that, I believe that bikes are common in our country.

'So depending on that' is an awkward and incorrect connector. Use 'Based on that' or 'Therefore' to convey the conclusion. 'Frequent' is not commonly used to describe objects as 'frequent'; use 'common' or 'popular'. Replace 'frequent' with 'common' for natural phrasing.