Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và ngữ pháp còn nhiều lỗi. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể. Sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng (I didn’t have), chia động từ phù hợp, và tránh câu lặp ý. Nên nối các ý bằng liên từ đơn giản (because, so, but). Ví dụ cải thiện nên có 2–3 câu, mỗi câu rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. Most of the children I went to school with either took the bus or walked, so I usually went with them.

提案: Câu trả lời trả lời trực tiếp nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn để nói về hiện tượng chung (I think), và thì quá khứ cho trải nghiệm cá nhân (when I was ten). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết về lý do phổ biến (giá rẻ, tiện lợi, giao thông) và dùng liên từ (for example, because, so) để liên kết ý. Giữ độ dài 2–3 câu và tránh lỗi chia động từ.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, when I was ten, many of my friends had bicycles and used them to go to school or hang out because cycling is inexpensive and convenient.

× When the children I go to school buys bus or walking by school, my family can have enough money to buy or buy for me.

✓ When I was a child and other children went to school by bus or on foot, my family did not have enough money to buy a bike for me.

The original sentence has multiple structure and agreement problems: word order is incorrect ('When the children I go to school'), tense is inconsistent, subject-verb agreement error ('children ... buys'), incorrect verb forms ('walking by school' should be 'on foot' or 'walk to school'), and incorrect modal/ability meaning with 'can have enough money'. Correct by restructuring the clause to 'When I was a child and other children went to school by bus or on foot' to match past time, use past simple 'did not have' for negative possession, and 'buy a bike for me' as the intended action. Suggestion: keep a clear subject, use consistent past tense for past situations, and choose correct prepositional phrase for walking ('on foot' or 'walk to school').

× Yes I think so because when I am a 10 year old all my friend are have a bicycle, go to school or to hang out.

✓ Yes, I think so because when I was ten years old all my friends had bicycles and used them to go to school or hang out.

Errors include wrong tense ('when I am a 10 year old' should be past: 'when I was ten years old'), singular/plural mistakes ('friend' -> 'friends', 'a bicycle' -> 'bicycles'), incorrect verb combination ('are have' is ungrammatical), and awkward infinitive phrase 'to go to school or to hang out' (better: 'used them to go to school or hang out'). Fix by using past simple 'was' and 'had', plural nouns for friends and bicycles, and clear verb phrases. Suggestion: match tense to the time reference, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use concise verb constructions.