Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant statements (e.g., “and I was a child” is unnecessary). Improve grammar (use past tense correctly) and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was about eight, and I used to ride it to my friend’s house every weekend. Because my neighborhood was quiet and safe, I learned to ride fast and became quite confident on it.

提案: Answer directly, then give two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use plural agreement and smoother linking (e.g., 'because' or 'therefore'). Avoid filler words like 'uh' and keep to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. One reason is that there are almost no dedicated bicycle lanes, so riding can be dangerous. In addition, public attitude favors cars and motorcycles, therefore many people prefer motor transport over cycling.

× Yes, I had a bike and I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence repeats 'I was a child' unnecessarily and places clauses incorrectly. The intended meaning is to state possession during childhood; this requires a dependent time clause 'when I was a child' attached to 'I had a bike'. Combine them to form a single clear sentence: 'I had a bike when I was a child.' This fixes sentence structure and improves clarity.

× There's almost no bicycle roads.

✓ There are almost no bicycle roads.

'There is' contracts to 'There's' and takes a singular noun. 'Bicycle roads' is plural, so use 'There are' to agree with the plural noun. Also consider the more natural plural noun 'bike lanes' or 'bicycle lanes' in context.

× So uh, many people doesn't like ride a bicycle in my country.

✓ So, many people don't like riding a bicycle in my country.

The subject 'many people' is plural, so the auxiliary must be 'do' for negative: 'don't' not 'doesn't'. After 'like' when referring to an activity, use the gerund form 'riding' rather than the bare verb 'ride'. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb agreement and correct verb form: 'many people don't like riding a bicycle.'