Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 问题回答要更自然且有结构。先用一句主题句直接回答，接着用1–2句具体细节支持，使用连词使句子通顺并注意时态与单词拼写（例如 commute 和 ride）。避免重复句子并保持在5句以内。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me so I could ride to school every day. I usually rode about 15 minutes from my home to school, and I really enjoyed the freedom it gave me.

提案: 回答要更准确且自然。用清晰的主题句表明观点，再用具体例子或数据支持。注意名词单复数和搭配（say “bikes are” 和 “commute to work”）。使用连接词如 “for example” 或 “because” 增强逻辑。

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many adults use bicycles to commute to work because traffic is heavy and cycling is cheaper. Children also ride bikes to school or for fun in the neighborhoods.

× I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me, to my school, to my commuting.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me for going to school and for my commute.

原句中“to my school, to my commuting”用法不正确。英语中表示“为了去学校/用于通勤”常用介词短语“for + 名词/动名词”（例如：for going to school, for my commute）。同时“commuting”通常用作动名词或名词短语“my commute”。因此建议改为“for going to school and for my commute”或更简洁的“to go to school and to commute”。

× When when I go to school from my home, I always write it.

✓ When I went to school from my home, I always rode it.

句中有多处问题：首先重复了“When when”；其次原句用现在时“go”与前句“had/went”时态不一致，应该使用过去时“went”；“write it”是错误动词，应为“ride it”（骑它）。根据上下文描述过去习惯，应使用过去时态“went”与“rode”。建议注意去掉重复词、动词选择和时态一致性。

× Yes, probably. I think bike is very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, probably. I think bikes are very popular in my country.

原句中缺少复数形式和冠词问题。“bike is very popular”不自然，应表示“一般自行车很受欢迎”用复数“bikes are”或定冠词“the bike is”取特指。因此改为复数“bikes are very popular”并使用复数与谓语一致。

× People, like adults, always ride it to commute to their company and some children.

✓ People, like adults, often ride them to commute to their workplaces, and some children do too.

原句中代词使用混乱：先用复数“People”后又用单数代词“it”，应使用复数代词“them”。此外“to their company”不自然，通常说“to their workplace”或“to work”。最后“and some children”缺少谓语，需补“do too”或重写为“and some children ride bikes as well”。建议保持代词数的一致，并补全句子结构。