Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct tense; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition. Correct verb forms (use past tense) and reduce redundancy.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I really wanted one because my friends all rode together after school, and I felt left out. For that reason, my parents bought me a scooter instead, which I used to practice balance until I was old enough for a bicycle.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g. "public transport") and provide one or two concrete examples or comparisons.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, most people prefer public transport or cars for commuting because cities are busy and cycling lanes are limited. As a result, you rarely see people using bicycles for daily travel except in parks or rural areas.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but when I was a child I really want to have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but when I was a child I really wanted to have a bike.

The sentence mixes past simple negative (I didn't have) with present tense 'want'. Both actions refer to the past, so the verb 'want' should be in the past tense 'wanted' for tense consistency. To improve, keep verbs referring to the same time in the same tense: 'I really wanted to have a bike.'

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country because usually I saw people go travel or go out is by some public transportation.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because usually I see people travel or go out by public transportation.

The original mixes present tense ('I don't think') with past tense 'saw' and contains awkward verb forms and word order. Use present simple 'I see' to match 'I don't think'. Also correct verb phrases: 'see people travel' or 'see people going out' and remove the extra 'is'. For clearer, natural English use: 'usually I see people travel or go out by public transportation.'