Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ грамматически корректно: используйте прошедшее время (past simple) и простую структуру предложения. Дайте прямой ответ, затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретной деталью (например, кто ей дарил велосипед, какого он был или где вы на нём катались). Избегайте лишних слов и повторов; держите ответ не длиннее 3–4 предложений.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I used to ride it around the neighborhood park every afternoon.

提案: Постройте предложение грамматически верно и яснее: начните с прямого мнения, затем приведите конкретные причины или примеры. Используйте подходящие слова (students, commuters, people concerned about the environment) и свяжите идеи связующими словами (for example, because, so). Сократите предложения до 2–3, избегайте ошибок в словах и согласовании.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many students and commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic, and environmentally conscious people prefer cycling to reduce pollution.

× Yeah, I have a bike when I. I have a bike when I work when I was child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student mixed present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was child' and produced a fragment 'when I.' Use past simple 'had' for a past situation: 'I had a bike when I was a child.' Also include the article 'a' before 'child' and remove the extra fragment. Suggestion: decide the time frame (past) and use past simple verbs consistently; write full clauses (avoid fragments).

× Yeah, it's one of the most popular transport among students, careers and just who agree ecology.

✓ Yeah, it's one of the most popular forms of transport among students, commuters and people who care about ecology.

Several issues: 'transport' as a mass noun needs a modifier like 'forms of transport'; 'among' is correct but the list items were incorrect: 'careers' is wrong for people who commute—use 'commuters'; 'who agree ecology' is ungrammatical—use 'who care about ecology' or 'who are concerned about the environment.' Also ensure parallel structure in the list. Suggestion: use correct nouns for groups (students, commuters), and use the prepositional phrase 'care about' to express concern for ecology.