Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and natural, with a direct topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve to a higher band, shorten redundant phrases (e.g., “my brother, my older brother”) and add one specific vivid detail (a brief memory or feeling) using a linking word to make the story more engaging. Keep the response under five sentences.

例: Yes — I did. I was given a bright red bike when I was five, and my older brother taught me to ride it in our backyard. Because he held the seat while I pedaled, I remember feeling both nervous and excited when I finally rode on my own.

提案: Good structure and relevant reasons. To improve, reduce repetition (e.g., “it's very economical and it's a nice way”) and add one specific example or statistic to support your point. Use a linking word (e.g., “for example” or “also”) to connect ideas and make the answer more coherent, and vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘cost-effective’ or ‘practical’).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. Many people commute to work or school by bicycle because it is cost-effective and helps them stay fit. For example, in my city several employers provide bike racks and showers to encourage cycling.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is grammatically correct for emphasis but unnecessary in this simple past statement. The simple past 'I had' is the standard, natural form. Suggestion: use 'I had' for concise, natural past-tense answers.

× I was gifted a bike when I was five years old and it was my brother, my older brother, who taught me how to ride a bike in our backyard.

✓ I was given a bike when I was five years old, and my older brother taught me how to ride it in our backyard.

'Was gifted' is a passive form that is acceptable but 'was given' is more natural in this context. The original repeats 'my brother, my older brother' which is redundant and wordy. Also 'ride a bike' can be shortened to 'ride it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use 'was given' and a pronoun for clarity and conciseness.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country.

The sentence is grammatically correct in present tense, but 'bikes' is informal; using 'bicycles' is more formal and fits exam settings. No tense change needed. Suggestion: prefer 'bicycles' for formal spoken answers.

× A lot of people use them to go to work, go to school, and it's very economical and it's a nice way to get some exercise and some physical activity throughout the day.

✓ Many people use them to go to work or to school; they are economical and a good way to get exercise during the day.

The original is long and repetitive ('a lot of' and 'some exercise and some physical activity' are redundant; 'it's' repeated). Also mixing 'and' with multiple clauses makes it clumsy. Suggestion: break into two clauses, replace 'a lot of' with 'many', use 'or' for alternatives, and avoid redundant phrases for clearer, more fluent speech.