Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve ilgili ancak dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlamalar ve mantık sorunları mevcut. Cümleleri daha kısa ve net kur; zaman ifadelerini doğru kullan; gereksiz tekrarları kaldır. Bağlaçlarla (for example, because, so, then) düşüncelerini daha düzenli bağla. Ayrıca "whenever I was a child" yerine "when I was a child" gibi doğal ifadeler kullan ve çelişkili ifade olan "now that bike is now with me because I just sold it six years ago" kısmını düzelt.

例: When I was a child, I had a quiet, fast bike that I used to ride everywhere. I crashed it a couple of times, but I enjoyed riding it a lot. I sold it six years ago because it became unusable.

提案: Cevap mantıklı ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları, zaman uyumsuzluğu ve genel ifadeler mevcut. Zamanları tutarlı kullan (e.g., "were" yerine "was" veya better: use present perfect/simple present). Daha spesifik örnekler ve bağlaçlar ekle (for example, because, therefore, however). "their times with technologies" ifadesi doğal değil; "spend time on technology" veya "on electronic devices" kullan.

例: Bikes used to be more popular in my country because public transport was less developed. However, nowadays fewer people ride bikes, especially children, who prefer to spend time on electronic devices. Therefore, the number of cyclists has decreased.

× Yes, I had a bike whenever I was a child that was a quiet, fast bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was quiet and fast.

The sentence uses 'whenever' incorrectly; 'when' is appropriate for a single time period. Also clarity and punctuation improve past tense narration. Suggest using 'when I was a child' and separate clauses with a semicolon or sentence. Use past tense consistently.

× I used to go to everywhere with that bike and I remember my times when I crashed with that bike for a couple of times already.

✓ I used to go everywhere with that bike, and I remember the times when I crashed that bike a couple of times.

Do not use 'go to everywhere'; use 'go everywhere'. 'My times' is unnatural; use 'the times'. 'Crashed with that bike' should be 'crashed that bike' or 'crashed while riding that bike'. Remove 'already' because past simple is sufficient. Maintain past tense consistency.

× And now that bike is now with me because I just sold it six years ago because it was no longer usable and I was no longer a child anymore.

✓ That bike is not with me now because I sold it six years ago; it was no longer usable and I was no longer a child.

The original mixes present and past awkwardly and uses redundant 'now' and 'anymore'. Use 'is not with me now' or simply 'is not with me'. 'Just sold it six years ago' is contradictory; remove 'just'. Keep past tense for events that happened six years ago. Avoid redundancy 'no longer... anymore'.

× I think bike was popular before in my country because these were the times when the public transport were not really widespread.

✓ I think bikes were popular before in my country because that was a time when public transport was not widespread.

Use plural 'bikes' to match general reference (or 'the bike' differently). 'Before' placement improved to 'before in my country' -> 'before in my country' acceptable but 'were popular before' fine. 'These were the times' is wordy; use 'that was a time when'. 'Public transport' is uncountable singular, so use 'was' not 'were'.

× But right now bikes are not that popular because also children prefer not to have bike, they just prefer to have their times with technologies or different things.

✓ But right now bikes are not that popular because children prefer not to have bikes; they prefer spending time with technology or other things.

Use plural 'bikes' to match 'children' and 'have bikes'. 'Have their times with technologies' is incorrect; use 'spending time with technology' or 'using technology'. 'Technology' is uncountable and singular. Improve parallel structure and word choice.

× That's why the number of bike users are being reduced.

✓ That's why the number of bike users is decreasing.

The subject 'the number' is singular, so use singular verb 'is'. 'Are being reduced' is passive and awkward here; use active 'is decreasing' or 'has decreased'. Also 'bike users' is fine; maintain tense consistency.