Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn đã truyền đạt ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, chia thì và độ tự nhiên; tránh lặp ý và rút gọn câu quá dài. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa thì và cấu trúc như 'I inherited' → đúng, nhưng 'since my family cannot afford' nên dùng quá khứ 'couldn't afford' hoặc 'at that time'. (2) Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý và dấu câu để chia câu dài thành hai câu ngắn hơn. (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể ngắn để làm rõ cảm xúc hoặc tần suất mà không lan man.

例: Yes, I did. It was a small bicycle I inherited from my cousin because my family couldn't afford a new one at the time. I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood, and I felt very proud to have it.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng đúng nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng và phát âm viết (trong văn bản) gây hiểu nhầm. Cần: (1) Chỉnh lỗi số nhiều/số ít và dùng từ chính xác: 'country' không 'countries'; 'famous for bikes, motorbikes and cars'. (2) Tránh lặp và mâu thuẫn: nếu most people ride motorbikes, giải thích vị trí xe đạp (children, leisure, exercise). (3) Dùng liên từ để tổ chức ý: contrast (however) hoặc cụ thể hóa với ví dụ. Viết ngắn gọn 2–3 câu, mỗi câu rõ ý.

例: Yes, bikes are popular in Vietnam, but mostly among children and for short trips. Most adults prefer motorbikes because they are faster for commuting, while many schoolchildren ride bicycles to school or use them for play.

× It was a small bicycle that I inherited from my cousin since my family cannot afford a new one at that time.

✓ It was a small bicycle that I had inherited from my cousin because my family could not afford a new one at that time.

'Inherited' as a past action is fine but 'since' with a past time needs 'because' or 'as'; also 'cannot' should be past 'could not' to match past timeframe. Use past perfect 'had inherited' to show the inheritance happened before the reference past time (when you had the bike). Suggestion: use 'because' for reason clauses and match verb tense to the past context.

× I remember I ride that bicycle every day in the afternoon.

✓ I remember riding that bicycle every day in the afternoon.

When reporting a past habitual action after 'I remember', English normally uses the gerund 'remember + -ing' to refer to memories of past actions. 'I remember I ride' mixes present tense 'ride' with a past reference. Use 'remember riding' or 'I remember that I rode' to be correct.

× Yes, Vietnam is a countries that famous for buys, motor buys and cars and you can see most people will ride a motorcycle or motorbikes on the street and bicycle is very popular among children ranging from primary school to high school.

✓ Yes, Vietnam is a country that is famous for buses, motorbikes and cars, and you can see most people riding motorcycles or motorbikes on the street. Bicycles are very popular among children from primary school to high school.

Multiple errors: 'countries' should be singular 'country' (singular/plural). 'that famous' needs the verb 'is' (therefore also subject-verb agreement/present tense). 'buys' is incorrect spelling; likely 'buses' or 'cars'—here 'buses' and 'motorbikes' are correct nouns. 'motor buys' and 'motorbikes' redundancy fixed to 'motorcycles or motorbikes'. Use gerund 'riding' after 'see' to describe ongoing action. 'bicycle is' should be plural 'bicycles are' because referring to the general category. Suggestions: check noun forms, add required verbs, and ensure subject and verb number agree.