Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and use linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, articles, pronouns) and avoid unclear phrases like “I do not cry back.” Keep the reply to no more than five sentences. For example, say when you had the bike, why you needed it (e.g. to get to school), and one brief memory or feeling about riding with friends.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I needed it to ride to school every day from primary through high school, so it was essential for my commute. Also, I enjoyed cycling with my friends after a long day at school because it helped me relax and have fun. Overall, my bike was both practical and a source of good memories.

提案: Clarify your main point and use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct answer (yes/no or partly), then give specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and avoid vague phrases like “you know” or confusing chronology. Mention whether popularity differs by age group or urban/rural areas and give one concrete reason (convenience, traffic, cost).

例: I think bike popularity depends on the area. In many cities, people prefer motorbikes or electric scooters because they are faster and more convenient for commuting. However, in rural areas and among children, bicycles are still common for short trips and recreation. For example, parents often buy bikes for their children to ride to school or to play with friends.

× Yes I did because the bike is requirement for me when I have to go to school throughout UMM primary school, secondary school and high school.

✓ Yes, I did because a bike was a requirement for me when I had to go to school throughout primary, secondary, and high school at UMM.

Error type 22 (Article errors): The sentence omits the indefinite article before 'requirement' and uses 'the bike is requirement' which is ungrammatical. Also tense consistency: past context ('when you were a child') requires past tense verbs. Use 'a bike' or 'a requirement' and change verbs to past tense ('was', 'had'). Use commas to separate list items and place the institution name after the list for clarity.

× I do not cry back.

✓ I did not cry about it.

Error type 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns / idiomatic expression): 'cry back' is not an English idiom and uses present tense while the context is past. The intended meaning is likely 'I did not cry about it' or 'I did not complain.' Use past tense 'did not' to match the story and the correct preposition 'about.'

× Bike is important for me also because I love to cycling around after long day at school with my friends.

✓ A bike was important to me also because I loved cycling around after a long day at school with my friends.

Error type 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs) and 8 (Verb + -ing form): 'Bike is' lacks an article; tense should be past. 'I love to cycling' mixes infinitive and gerund incorrectly — use 'loved cycling' or 'love to cycle.' Also add 'a' before 'long day' and maintain past tense to match earlier sentences.

× From my perspective, from 60s to the rural area, people are prefer to choosing electrical vehicles because that's more convenient and people will have less time will and you know less time to go to the purse to the places that they want to go.

✓ From my perspective, since the 1960s in rural areas, people prefer choosing electric vehicles because they are more convenient, and people have less time to go to the places they want to go.

Error type 6 (Present tense issue) and 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs): 'from 60s to the rural area' is ungrammatical—use 'since the 1960s in rural areas.' 'are prefer to choosing' incorrectly combines auxiliary and verb forms; correct is 'prefer choosing' or 'prefer to choose.' 'electrical vehicles' should be 'electric vehicles.' Remove redundant 'will' and 'you know' and fix 'go to the purse to the places' which is incorrect—use 'go to the places.' Ensure present simple for general truth: 'people prefer' and 'people have.'