Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, concise direct answer first (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words (but, however, because) to connect ideas and keep the response within 3–4 sentences. For example, mention whether you had a bike, who bought it or not, and a brief reason for your feelings about bikes.

例: No, I didn’t have a regular two-wheel bike as a child. I had a small four-wheeled tricycle for a short time, but my parents never bought me a proper bike because they were worried about safety. As a result, I never developed much interest in cycling.

提案: Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No or A little). Use linking words (however, although, for example) and give specific, organized details: who uses bikes, why they use them, and an illustrative example if relevant. Avoid filler words (um, uh) and vague phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, plurals).

例: Bikes are somewhat popular in my country, but they are not the main mode of transport. For example, many older people and teenagers use bicycles for exercise or short commutes; however, most commuters prefer motorcycles or cars because they are faster. I once saw an American traveler cycling around the Philippines, which showed me that cycling can also attract tourists.

× When I had a four wheel bike when I was a child but I never had the four wheel bike since my parents nor never bought me one and I personally don't like a bike and I don't like going outside.

✓ I had a four-wheel bike when I was a child, but my parents never bought me one after that. I personally don't like bikes and I don't like going outside.

This original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (ID 26) and subject-verb agreement and article issues. It repeats 'when' and 'four wheel bike' unnecessarily and uses 'since' and 'nor never' incorrectly. Breaking it into two sentences improves clarity. Use 'four-wheel' as a compound adjective, 'never bought me one' (correct verb phrase), use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, and remove redundant negatives ('nor never'). Also ensure conjunction 'but' connects two balanced clauses. Suggestion: Separate ideas into clear sentences, use compound adjectives with a hyphen, and avoid double negatives.

× When I had a four wheel bike when I was a child but I never had the four wheel bike since my parents nor never bought me one and I personally don't like a bike and I don't like going outside.

✓ I had a four-wheel bike when I was a child, but my parents never bought me the four-wheel bike, and I personally don't like bikes and don't like going outside.

The original uses articles incorrectly (ID 22). 'A four wheel bike' should be 'a four-wheel bike' (compound adjective) and when referring to that specific bike later it should be 'the four-wheel bike'. However the sentence is still awkward; choose either to say you had one or that your parents didn't buy you one. Suggestion: decide whether you owned a bike or were never given one and use 'a' for any one and 'the' for a specific previously mentioned item.

× I personally don't like a bike and I don't like going outside.

✓ I personally don't like bikes and I don't like going outside.

Using 'a bike' implies one specific bike rather than bikes in general (ID 1). If the speaker means the activity in general, use the plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking about general preferences.

× I don't think bike are popular in our country but still a lot of people use it, especially older people and the teens uh they use it as a form of exercising and commuting.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in our country, but a lot of people still use them. Especially older people and teenagers use bikes for exercise and commuting.

This sentence has subject-verb agreement and plural/pronoun consistency issues (ID 27 and ID 1). 'Bike are' should be 'bikes are' because subject must be plural; 'use it' should be 'use them' to match plural 'bikes'. Also 'the teens' is unnatural; use 'teenagers'. Suggestion: Ensure nouns and verbs agree in number and pronouns match their antecedents.

× I don't think bike are popular in our country but still a lot of people use it, especially older people and the teens uh they use it as a form of exercising and commuting.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in our country, but a lot of people still use them, especially older people and teenagers. They use bikes for exercise and commuting.

This further corrects article/pronoun and word-choice issues (ID 22). 'The teens' is incorrect when speaking generally; omit 'the' or say 'the teenagers in my area'. Also 'a form of exercising' is unnatural; 'for exercise' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Use idiomatic phrases ('for exercise') and general noun forms without 'the' when speaking broadly.

× I also saw umm American man who traveled in the Philippines using a bike just.

✓ I also saw an American man traveling around the Philippines by bike.

The original sentence has awkward word order and missing article (ID 26 and ID 22). It needs the indefinite article 'an' before 'American man', 'traveled in the Philippines using a bike just' is ungrammatical and awkward. Reorder to 'traveling around the Philippines by bike' for natural expression. Suggestion: Use correct articles and natural collocations such as 'travel around a country by bike'.