Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, fluency and correctness. Give a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'ride' instead of 'Pike'), avoid pauses and sentence fragments, and add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me to ride when I was about ten, and he used to take me to a nearby street to practice. I remember feeling excited but a little nervous at first, and after a few weeks I became much more confident.

提案: Make the response more natural and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word (for example 'because' or 'therefore'). Correct grammar (use 'depends'→'depend', 'former country'→'my country' if referring to current country) and use more context-specific vocabulary ('cycling lanes', 'private cars'). Keep it concise.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country because there are few dedicated cycling lanes and the infrastructure is poor. As a result, most people rely on private cars or motorcycles for daily travel.

× Yes, my father taught me how to to Pike when I was about 10. He. He took me to a nearby St. to practice and I remember feeling.

✓ Yes, my father taught me how to ride a bike when I was about ten. He took me to a nearby street to practice, and I remember feeling excited.

Errors: repeated word 'to to' (typo), 'Pike' is incorrect spelling for 'bike' (spelling error), capitalized 'St.' and fragment 'He.' create sentence fragments and unclear abbreviation, '10' should be written as 'ten' in formal speech. Also the original ends with 'feeling.' without completing the feeling (sentence fragment). Correction fixes spelling, removes repetition, expands abbreviation, combines fragments into one complete sentence, and supplies a plausible completed feeling. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and spelling, avoid fragments by completing thoughts before ending sentences, and write numbers as words in spoken/formal transcripts. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Actually, no, my former country does not have many cycling roads. And people there mostly depends on private transportation rather than public.

✓ Actually, no. My former country does not have many cycle paths, and people there mostly depend on private transportation rather than public transportation.

Errors: 'cycling roads' is an awkward collocation; 'cycle paths' or 'bike lanes' is more natural (word choice). 'depends' is incorrect because the plural subject 'people' requires the base form 'depend' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27). Also the sentence used two separate sentences with 'And' starting one; combining them improves flow (sentence structure, ID 26). Suggestion: use natural collocations for infrastructure (bike lanes, cycle paths), ensure verb agrees with plural subjects, and avoid starting short fragments with 'And' unless informal; join clauses for clarity.