Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваша відповідь зрозуміла, але звучить не дуже природно через граматичні помилки та зайві слова. Поради: 1) Використовуйте правильний час (past simple) — «I didn’t have a bike». 2) Уникайте змішування часів і зайвих фраз — скажіть прямо, хто купив велосипед і як ви ним користувалися. 3) Скоротіть відповідь до 2–3 речень, використовуйте зв’язки (for example, so) для плавності. 4) Додайте одну конкретну деталь (наприклад, де ви каталися або як часто).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My friend bought one, so we often swapped bikes and rode around my neighbourhood every weekend.

提案: Відповідь має правильну ідею, але багато заповнювачів (uh, umm) і повторів, а також некоректна структура. Поради: 1) Уникайте заповнювачів — робіть паузи замість «uh». 2) Формулюйте чітке пояснення з причиною (because) і дайте приклад або оцінку ступеня популярності. 3) Використовуйте зв’язки (because, so, for example) і конкретні дані, якщо можливо. 4) Обмежте відповідь до 2–3 речень.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because public transport is expensive. For example, many people cycle to work or school to save money and avoid traffic.

× No, I did not, but I have dreamed about it and my friend bought it and we can switch to each other's bike and ride around my house.

✓ No, I did not, but I had dreamed about it; then my friend bought one and we could share each other's bikes and ride around my neighborhood.

The sentence mixes tenses and has awkward modality. Use past perfect 'had dreamed' to show the dreaming happened before the friend bought the bike. 'Bought it' is unclear; use 'bought one' or 'bought a bike.' 'We can switch to each other's bike' is unnatural: use 'we could share each other's bikes' or 'we could swap bikes.' 'Around my house' is better as 'around my neighborhood' for natural English. Also punctuation and sentence structure should be adjusted to avoid a run-on sentence. Suggestion: keep a consistent past narrative: 'I had dreamed about it; then my friend bought a bike and we could swap bikes to ride around the neighborhood.'

× Yes, uh, 'cause we have uh, uh, very umm. Very expensive public transport and our people trying to use bikes, uh, on, uh, daily on daily.

✓ Yes, because public transport is very expensive here, so people try to use bikes daily.

The original contains hesitations and incorrect tense and word order. Use simple present 'is' for a general fact: 'public transport is very expensive.' 'Our people trying to use bikes' lacks an auxiliary verb; use 'people try to use bikes' (simple present). Remove redundant words 'on, uh, daily on daily.' Also replace informal 'our people' with 'people' or 'people here.' Improve cohesion with 'so' to show cause and effect. Suggestion: produce a clear concise sentence: 'Yes, because public transport is very expensive here, people try to use bikes every day.'