Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two supporting details (who taught you, how you felt, a short example). Use correct tense and simple sentence structure to avoid confusion. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My brother taught me how to ride it, and I remember falling a few times before I learned. I found it exciting because it gave me more freedom to explore the neighborhood.

提案: Answer directly and support with specific, organized reasons. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then give one or two concrete observations or comparisons using linking words such as “for example,” “for instance,” or “because.” Correct common grammar errors (a lot, parks, people). Keep sentences varied but concise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for exercise and short trips. For example, local parks are often full of children and couples cycling on weekends, and many students ride bikes to school to save money on transport.

× As I used to have my bike had my bike, I bother told me how to ride bike and it was very interesting for me.

✓ When I had my bike, my brother (or parent) told me how to ride it, and it was very interesting for me.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: repeated phrases ('used to have my bike had my bike'), wrong word choice ('bother' should be 'brother' or 'parent'), missing articles and pronouns ('ride bike' should be 'ride it' or 'ride a bike'), and awkward coordination. Suggestion: simplify the clause order, use a clear subject ('my brother' or 'my parent'), include the object pronoun 'it' for 'bike', and use a single past reference 'When I had my bike' to match the past time frame. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It is because in the park, when we go to park, there are a lots of children and other couples to ride a bike.

✓ It is because in the park, when we go to the park, there are a lot of children and couples riding bikes.

Errors: 'a lots of' is incorrect; the correct form is 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. Also 'go to park' needs the definite article 'the park'. 'Other couples to ride a bike' is ungrammatical; use 'couples riding bikes' to express ongoing activity. Suggestion: use 'the park', 'a lot of', and the present participle 'riding' to indicate habitual or observed action. Grammar problem type ID:14

× And when I was younger I also used to ride my bike.

✓ And when I was younger, I also used to ride my bike.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but missing a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action. Suggestion: add a comma after 'younger' to improve readability and maintain the past habitual tense. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is correct; subject 'bikes' and verb 'are' agree. No correction needed. Suggestion: none. Grammar problem type ID:27