Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and informative by giving a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Correct minor phrasing (e.g., 'ride' instead of 'use') and avoid unnecessary words. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I couldn't ride it at first. For example, my parents bought it for me when I was six, and I practiced with training wheels for a few weeks before I learned to balance.

提案: Give a clearer topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Fix vocabulary and grammar ("bikes," not "buys"; avoid repeated words). Use linking words to structure the answer (e.g., 'because' and 'for example').

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many young people want to keep fit and reduce commuting costs. For example, students often cycle to university to save money and get daily exercise, and cities are adding more bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× Yes, nowadays buys are popular in my country because because young people are focused on improving health, healthy, improving healthy and they want a healthy life balance.

✓ Yes, nowadays bikes are popular in my country because young people are focused on improving their health and want a healthy life balance.

The sentence contains a plural noun error: 'buys' is a misspelling of 'bikes' (singular/plural vocabulary error) and should be 'bikes'. Also there is redundancy and adjective/adverb misuse: 'improving health, healthy, improving healthy' is ungrammatical. Change to 'improving their health' to use the correct noun phrase and possessive pronoun. Remove duplicate words and combine clauses: 'focused on improving their health and want a healthy life balance.' This fixes singular/plural and adjective/adverb problems and improves clarity.

× Yes, nowadays buys are popular in my country because because young people are focused on improving health, healthy, improving healthy and they want a healthy life balance.

✓ Yes, nowadays bikes are popular in my country because young people are focused on improving their health and want a healthy life balance.

The original uses 'improving health' without a determiner or possessive; English normally uses 'improving their health' to show whose health is meant. Using the possessive pronoun 'their' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer. Also remove repeated words and correct 'buys' to 'bikes'.