Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện sự rõ ràng và ngữ pháp. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “I I”, “left, left, left”), dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, mạch lạc (không quá 5 câu). Ngoài ra nên thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tuổi khi nhận xe, màu sắc hay kỷ niệm ngắn) và dùng liên từ khi cần mở rộng ý.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in high school. My older brother gave me his old blue bike when I was 15, and I used it to ride to school every day. It wasn’t very fast, but I enjoyed cycling with my friends on weekends.

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp (số ít/ số nhiều), độ mạch lạc và từ vựng chính xác. Tránh tiếng lấp và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm, giải thích lý do và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, and).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Motorbikes are the most common for adults because they are cheap and convenient, while children often use simple pedal bikes to go to school. For example, many parents buy small bicycles for their kids to ride around the neighborhood.

× Yes I I used to have a bike when I was high school.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was in high school.

The phrase 'was high school' is missing the preposition 'in' and the article 'high school' needs the prepositional phrase 'in high school' to indicate time; also duplicate 'I' should be removed. Suggestion: remove the repeated word and include 'in' before 'high school' to form the correct past time expression.

× Umm my brother left, left left to me his bike.

✓ My brother left his bike to me.

The original sentence repeats 'left' and uses an awkward word order. The correct pronoun placement is 'left his bike to me' where 'his' modifies 'bike' and 'to me' indicates the recipient. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use correct word order: subject + verb + object + to + recipient.

× Yes uh uh, the bikes is one of the most popular in my countries.

✓ Yes, bikes are among the most popular in my country.

'Bikes' is plural so the verb should be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). 'One of the most popular' should be rephrased to 'among the most popular' for plural subjects, and 'my countries' should be 'my country' for singular reference. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and use correct singular/plural noun forms.

× The first one is motorbike and second one is bike uh, for children uh, goes to school every day and somewhere I don't know.

✓ The first is the motorbike and the second is the bicycle; children use bicycles to go to school every day, and sometimes they go elsewhere.

Articles are needed: 'the motorbike' and 'the second' require 'the'. 'Bike' is better as 'bicycle' in formal speech. The clause 'for children goes to school' lacks a subject and proper verb agreement; include 'children use bicycles' or 'children go to school by bicycle'. Also 'somewhere I don't know' is informal and unclear; rephrase to 'sometimes they go elsewhere.' Suggestion: add definite articles where referencing specific items, provide a clear subject for the verb, and use precise adverbial phrases.