Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn và có cấu trúc. Hiện tại có lỗi ngữ pháp (thì, mạo từ), từ lặp (“for for”), và câu không mạch lạc. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu một - hai chi tiết cụ thể và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Ví dụ: nêu màu xe, ai mua, và vì sao thích. Hạn chế độ dài không quá 3–4 câu.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small pink bicycle when I was six, and I used it to ride to a friend’s house. It was easy to handle and made me feel independent, so I rode it almost every day.

提案: Câu trả lời lặp ý, có lỗi ngữ pháp (số ít/ số nhiều, word order), và nhiều cụm từ thừa (“use buy”, “also suitable for them too”). Cần trả lời trực tiếp rồi đưa lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” hợp lý. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: khoảng cách ngắn, an toàn, chi phí) để khiến câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially among students, because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For instance, many students ride bicycles to school since the distances are short and bikes are easier to park than motorbikes.

× In my country every child will have a bike that bought from their parents for for example I have the pink one because I used to use the small one.

✓ In my country every child has a bike that is bought from their parents; for example, I had a pink one because I used to use the small one.

Lỗi số nhiều/ít: 'every child' is singular so verb and pronouns should match singular form and passive construction needs 'is bought'. Use present simple 'has' for habitual past or present general truths. Also correct word order and duplicate 'for'. Suggestion: use 'every child has' and 'that is bought'.

× Too easy to use.

✓ It was too easy to use.

This is a sentence fragment missing a subject and verb. Add 'It was' to form a complete sentence describing the bike. Suggestion: use a subject + verb when making comments.

× Of course bike are very popular in my country especially for student because motorbike are suited are not suitable enough for them to go to school, so they usually use buy as a main transportation to go to school because it's easy to use and also suitable for them too.

✓ Of course bikes are very popular in my country, especially for students, because motorbikes are not suitable enough for them to go to school, so they usually use bikes as their main transportation to get to school because they are easy to use and suitable for them.

Multiple number agreement errors: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' and 'student' -> 'students'. 'Motorbike are' should be 'motorbikes are'. Also remove duplicated/misplaced words: 'are suited are not suitable' and 'use buy'. Use 'use bikes' or 'use bikes as their main transportation'. Maintain subject-verb agreement and consistent plural forms.