Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable and gives relevant information, but it can be improved by being more natural and concise, using a clearer topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid words like "operate" for riding a bike and reduce redundancy (e.g., "of my own" plus "borrow"). Also keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to show sequence.

例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child, but I learned to ride on my cousin’s bike. For example, between ages nine and twelve I practised every weekend until I felt confident riding on quiet streets.

提案: The answer addresses the question but contains repetition, grammar mistakes, and unclear timeline. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two concise reasons with specific details, and correct tense and wording. Remove duplicated words and clarify personal reference (when you started riding motorbikes). Use linking words like "because" or "however" correctly.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country because most people prefer motorbikes for their speed and convenience. For instance, I switched to a motorbike at about fifteen because it saved time on my daily commute.

× Unfortunately, I did not have a bike of my own, although I did borrow my cousin's bike to operate and learn how to ride from age 9 to age 12.

✓ Unfortunately, I did not have a bike of my own, although I borrowed my cousin's bike to learn how to ride from age nine to twelve.

Issues: unnecessary auxiliary 'did' with borrow (past simple should be 'borrowed'), wrong verb 'operate' for using a bike, and inconsistent numeric style. Explanation: In simple past narrative use the past form 'borrowed' rather than 'did borrow'. The verb 'operate' is inappropriate for riding a bicycle; 'use' or 'ride' is correct — here 'learn how to ride' covers it so 'operate' should be removed. Writing numbers as words for small ages is stylistically better. Suggestion: Use past simple 'borrowed' and write 'learn how to ride' without 'operate'.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country, mainly because people would rather use motorbikes than than bikes because it gets them from point A to point B faster that it also includes me.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country, mainly because people prefer motorbikes to bikes since they get people from point A to point B faster, and I do the same.

Issues: Redundant 'than than', awkward 'would rather use' form and wrong comparative connector, incorrect pronoun reference 'it gets them' and unclear 'that it also includes me'. Explanation: Use 'prefer X to Y' or 'would rather X than Y' (not both). Remove duplicate 'than'. Replace vague 'it gets them' with 'they get people' to match plural 'motorbikes'. 'That it also includes me' is ungrammatical; use 'and I do the same' to express personal inclusion. Use simple present 'prefer' to state general truth. Suggestion: Say 'prefer motorbikes to bikes' and 'they get people... faster, and I do the same.'

× I've been riding since 15 to 18.

✓ I rode from age fifteen to eighteen.

Issue: Incorrect use of present perfect progressive 'I've been riding since 15 to 18' when referring to a past time period. 'Since' requires a specific start point and is used with present perfect continuous for actions continuing to now; here the period is bounded in the past. Use simple past 'rode' and express the range as 'from age fifteen to eighteen.' Also write numbers as words. Suggestion: Use 'I rode from age fifteen to eighteen' to indicate a past duration.