Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ короткий и понятный, но можно улучшить структуру и дать больше деталей. Сначала дайте чёткое тематическое предложение, затем одну-две поддерживающие детали и, по возможности, укажите причину и итог. Используйте связку для плавного перехода (for example, so, because). Избегайте слишком буквальных выражений и постарайтесь сделать ответ более естественным и развернутым.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I was afraid of falling, so my parents preferred I walk or use public transport. As a result, I only started learning to ride in my late teens, which made me a bit slower to gain confidence.

提案: Ответ частично уходит в тему, но содержит ошибку (слово «cooking» вместо «cycling») и несколько неясных выражений ("half traffic", "bike landings"). Исправьте лексику, уточните идею и используйте логические связки. Начните с общего утверждения о популярности велосипедов, затем приведите конкретную причину и пример. Избегайте ненужных слов и исправьте неверные термины.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my city, especially among students. They are often faster than cars during rush hour, and there are many dedicated cycle lanes and secure bike parking near universities. For instance, many students cycle to campus every day because it is cheap and convenient.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was scared when I rode a bike.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of riding a bike.

The phrase 'scared when I rode a bike' is awkward and mixes past time clause with habitual or general fear. Use 'scared of' + gerund to express fear of an activity in general or in the past: 'scared of riding a bike'. This keeps the past meaning (did not have) while correctly describing the fear. Also using the gerund avoids implying a single event; if you mean a specific event, you could say 'because I was scared when I rode a bike once.'

× In my city, cooking is quite popular, especially among young people, because it's easy and often quicker than driving in half traffic.

✓ In my city, cycling is quite popular, especially among young people, because it's easy and often quicker than driving in heavy traffic.

The original uses 'cooking' instead of 'cycling' which is likely a word choice error, not a grammar category listed, but 'in half traffic' is incorrect preposition and phrase. Use 'in heavy traffic' to describe traffic density. Also 'quicker than driving in heavy traffic' is the correct comparative structure. Replace 'cooking' with 'cycling' to match context about bikes.

× For example, many students use bikes to get to university since there are good bike landings and parking near campuses.

✓ For example, many students use bikes to get to university since there are good bike lanes and parking areas near campus.

'Bike landings' is incorrect; the correct term is 'bike lanes'. Use 'parking areas' or 'bike parking' rather than just 'parking' when referring to bicycle parking. 'Near campuses' is acceptable, but 'near campus' or 'near campuses' depends on whether speaking generally; 'near campus' is common in general statements. The prepositional choices and noun forms are adjusted for natural English.