Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer a clear short statement, correct tense and grammar, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences. For example, say when you received the bike, who taught you, and one memory or place you rode to.

例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a small blue bike when I was seven, and she taught me how to ride it in our neighborhood park. After that, I often rode around our nearby streets to visit friends and run small errands, which made me feel independent.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons or an example linked logically. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'bikes are popular' not 'boys are popular') and avoid hesitation. Use one or two supporting details about who uses bikes and why (cost, convenience, environment).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many students and workers use bicycles because they are cheap and convenient for short trips, and cities with bike lanes make cycling safer.

× Yes, I have it. A bike when I was a child because my mom bought me a She teach me how to ride a bike and I'm going around my city. Yeah.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my mom bought me one. She taught me how to ride it, and I used to ride around my city.

Tenses and sentence structure are incorrect. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child' (Present tense vs past tense issue, ID 6 and 5). 'A bike when I was a child' is a fragment; combine into one sentence. 'A' before 'She teach' is incorrect and missing subject; 'one' is used instead of repeating 'bike'. 'She teach' should be past 'she taught' (past tense issue, ID 5). 'I'm going around my city' is awkward for past habitual action; use 'I used to ride around my city' (present tense vs past habitual). Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use complete clauses, use 'one' to avoid repetition, and use 'taught' and 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× Yes, boys are popular in my country because can I, can I give an example, uh, like, uh, we use, we go to New York place, uh, with bike and is this easy? And, uh, how can I say, uh, for first, Yeah.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. For example, people often ride bikes to places in New York because it is easy. To begin with, ...

Multiple issues: 'boys are popular' is incorrect word choice and likely meant 'bikes are popular' (incorrect use of words/pronouns, ID 12/26). Sentence fragments and disfluencies should be removed. 'We use, we go to New York place, with bike' is ungrammatical; correct to 'people often ride bikes to places in New York' using a general subject and correct noun 'bikes' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'Is this easy?' should be 'because it is easy' to form a proper clause (sentence structure issue, ID 26). Suggestion: state the main idea clearly, use correct noun 'bikes', avoid fillers, and use complete sentences with subject and verb agreement.