Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Correct pronunciation and word order (e.g., "a bike with the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles on it" not "turtles Prince"). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I got my first mini bike when I was four, and it had Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles stickers on the frame. I learned to ride it in our backyard, and it was my favourite toy for several years.

提案: Provide a clear opinion sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition (don’t repeat "nowadays" and remove fillers like "umm" and "uh"). Use correct subject-verb agreement ("bikes are" not "bikes is"). Finish the thought instead of trailing off.

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country. Firstly, they are cheap and convenient for short trips, so many people use them to commute to work or markets. Secondly, recent investments in bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes have made cycling safer and more accessible.

× It was a bike with in the turtles Prince and this was.

✓ It was a bike with the Turtle Prince on it.

Original sentence has word order and plural/singular issues: 'turtles' should be singular possessive or noun phrase 'Turtle Prince', and 'with in' is incorrect. Correct phrase 'with the Turtle Prince on it' uses singular noun and correct preposition and word order.

× In my opinion, nowadays bikes in my country getting more popular than ever because nowadays umm bikes is the easiest way of transport to get from A to B distance destination and uh, nowadays we have.

✓ In my opinion, nowadays bikes in my country are becoming more popular than ever because bicycles are the easiest way to get from A to B, and we now have better bike lanes and services.

Multiple present-tense and agreement errors: 'getting' needs an auxiliary 'are becoming' for present continuous; 'bikes is' is subject-verb agreement error (plural subject needs 'are' or use 'bicycles are'); awkward phrases 'way of transport to get from A to B distance destination' should be simplified to 'the easiest way to get from A to B'. Also sentence was incomplete, so add a plausible ending 'we now have better bike lanes and services.' Suggestions: use correct auxiliary verbs for continuous tenses, match plural subjects with plural verbs, simplify redundant words like 'nowadays'.

× Firstly I had a mini bike when I was four years old.

✓ Firstly, I had a minibike when I was four years old.

The past tense 'had' is correct for the time reference 'when I was four years old', but punctuation and word form can be improved: add a comma after 'Firstly' and write 'minibike' as one word or 'mini bike' consistently. Suggestion: use a comma after sentence adverbs and consistent compound noun spelling.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is grammatically correct; no structural change needed. Keep past tense 'had' to match the time frame 'when I was a child'.

× It was a bike with in the turtles Prince and this was.

✓ It was a bike with the Turtle Prince on it.

Original included incorrect sequence 'and this was' which is redundant and ungrammatical. Use a clear participle phrase 'with the Turtle Prince on it' to describe the bike. Ensure correct preposition 'on' for printed characters and correct capitalization for proper name 'Turtle Prince'.