Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two short supporting details. Use correct past tense and plural forms, avoid repeating words, and use linking words if adding details. For example, say why you didn’t have a bike (e.g. family couldn’t afford it or preferred walking) and mention if you wanted to learn to ride. Keep to 1–3 sentences and correct common errors (parents, wanted, ride, learn).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, I wanted to learn to ride, and I used to watch other children cycle in the park.

提案: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific, relevant reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘many people’, ‘affordable’, ‘popular for short trips’, ‘exercise’). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ and give one precise reason or example rather than vague phrases. Keep answers concise and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many commuters use bicycles to travel to work in crowded city areas, and others cycle for exercise and leisure.

× No, because my parent and my parents don't try write and buy and ride the bike.

✓ No, because my parents didn't try to teach me to ride a bike or buy one.

Pronoun and noun number: 'my parent and my parents' is redundant and inconsistent; use 'my parents' (plural). Verb tense and structure: the sentence refers to the past, so use past tense 'didn't try'. Verb forms: after 'try' to express an attempt followed by an infinitive ('to teach' or 'to show'), not bare verb 'write'. Word choice: 'write' and 'ride' were confused; likely meant 'teach' and 'ride'. Use 'to teach me to ride a bike' and include 'or buy one' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify to 'my parents didn't try to teach me to ride a bike or buy one.'

× But I wanna learn right and bike.

✓ But I want to learn how to ride a bike.

Colloquial contraction: 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to' in standard English. Word choice and verb form: 'learn right' is incorrect; should be 'learn how to ride'. 'Ride a bike' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: say 'I want to learn how to ride a bike.'

× Yes because more rupee people doing compressional for on the world and the people.

✓ Yes, because more people are using bikes around the world.

Word choice and order: 'more rupee people' is nonsensical; likely meant 'more people'. Grammar: present continuous passive/active idea requires 'are using'. Extra incorrect words 'doing compressional for on the world and the people' are unclear; replace with 'around the world' to convey global popularity. Suggestion: use 'more people are using bikes around the world.'

× It is for funny and for enjoying the process.

✓ They are fun and enjoyable.

Agreement and word choice: 'It' does not agree with plural 'bikes'; use 'They'. 'For funny' is incorrect; 'fun' is an adjective. 'For enjoying the process' is awkward; use 'enjoyable' or 'they are enjoyable' or 'riding is enjoyable'. Suggestion: say 'Bikes are fun and enjoyable.' or 'Riding a bike is fun and enjoyable.'