Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but a bit short and generic. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who taught you, a memorable moment) using a linking word. Keep it natural and within 3–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I did — it was one of my favorite toys when I was young. In fact, it was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my father gave me for my sixth birthday, and he spent many afternoons teaching me to ride. I remember feeling very proud the first time I cycled down our street on my own.

提案: Your answer shows confidence but contains informal fillers, a typo ("trans"), and a vague claim. To improve, use a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and support your opinion with specific reasons or examples (e.g., cost, traffic, environment, statistics). Use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or school to avoid heavy traffic, and cities often have dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling safer and more practical.

× Yes, it was one of my favorite toys when I was young.

✓ Yes, it was one of my favorite toys when I was a child.

The student used 'young' where 'a child' fits the context of 'when I was' better. This is an issue with choice of quantifier/wording rather than tense; use 'a child' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' for clarity in childhood references.

× Absolutely, bikes are like #1 trans, uh, ways of transportation for most of the people.

✓ Absolutely, bikes are one of the most popular means of transportation for most people.

The original contains informal filler ('like', 'uh'), an unclear symbol ('#1 trans') and awkward phrasing ('ways of transportation' and 'for most of the people'). This is primarily an adjective/word choice problem and wording clarity. Corrected version uses 'one of the most popular' (superlative phrase) and 'means of transportation' which is natural. Also drop 'the' before 'people'. Suggestion: avoid fillers, use 'one of the most popular means of transportation for most people.'