Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (bike, not bag), avoid filler words (umm, uh), use one or two supporting details and a linking word. Also correct grammar (past tense) and sentence structure. For example, say you had a small bike, who used it with you, and maybe where you used it. Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. It was a low‑frame children's bike with training wheels, and my parents bought it for me on my fifth birthday. I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me learn balance and made me more confident.

提案: Answer directly, use correct vocabulary and grammar, avoid unclear phrases ("translation way", "write a bike"). Use linking words to give reasons and an example. Give a clear opinion (yes/no) then explain why (traffic, convenience, cost) and mention electric bikes if relevant. Keep answers natural and under five sentences.

例: Not really; bicycles are not the most popular mode of transport in my country because roads are crowded and trips are often long. However, electric bikes are becoming more common since they make commuting easier and faster. For example, many people use e-bikes to travel short distances in the city to avoid traffic.

× Yeah, I have a bag uh, when I was a child, but it's not the umm, uh, same as as same as the normal bike is a little bike for umm, child and umm, at that time I.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was not the same as a normal bike; it was a small bike for children.

Multiple errors: wrong tense ('have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child') and sentence structure issues (repetition 'as as same as' and run-on phrasing). Also article use ('a normal bike' and 'a small bike for children') and word choice ('little' -> 'small', 'for children' is clearer). Suggestion: Maintain past tense for childhood events, remove repetitions, split ideas with punctuation, and use correct articles and clearer nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 6 and 26

× Actually, it's not the most popular translation way in my home country because it's like we need to waste lots of times to write a bike, but if we use a electric bike, it's.

✓ Actually, cycling is not the most popular mode of transport in my country because it takes a long time to ride a bike, but if we use an electric bike, it is easier.

Errors: incorrect word choice ('translation way' should be 'mode of transport' or 'way of transportation'), tense/verb forms ('we need to waste lots of times to write a bike' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'it takes a long time to ride a bike'), article error ('a electric bike' should be 'an electric bike'), and sentence fragment at the end ('it's' incomplete). Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary for transport, correct verb phrases ('take time' or 'takes a long time to ride'), use 'an' before vowel sounds, and finish clauses clearly. Grammar problem type ID: 11 and 6 and 22 and 26