Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, natural and personal, but slightly long and a bit informal (‘like’). To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking phrase. Avoid filler words and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a red bicycle for my eighth birthday, and I used it every day to visit friends and explore the neighborhood. Because it was my first independence, I remember feeling very proud and confident whenever I rode it.

提案: Your response answers the question directly but is repetitive and contains some awkward phrasing. Improve coherence by using linking words (however, because) and provide a specific reason or brief example to support your opinion. Also use more natural collocations (e.g., 'motorbikes' instead of 'motors').

例: Not really; bicycles are uncommon in my country because most people prefer cars and motorbikes for convenience and speed. For example, during rush hour many streets are dominated by cars and buses, so cycling is neither popular nor practical for long commutes.

× They like more going by their cars, buses, motors, so bicycles aren't very common.

✓ They prefer going by car, bus, or motorbike, so bicycles aren't very common.

The original uses 'like more going by their cars' which is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'prefer' + gerund to express preference (verb + -ing form required), and use singular vehicle nouns without possessive 'their' when speaking generally. Also 'motors' is an incorrect noun here; 'motorbike' (or 'motorcycle') is appropriate. Improve parallelism by listing 'car, bus, or motorbike.'

× They like more going by their cars, buses, motors, so bicycles aren't very common.

✓ They prefer going by car, bus, or motorbike, so bicycles aren't very common.

Using 'their cars' implies specific owners and is unnecessary when speaking generally about people in a country; use the general noun (car, bus, motorbike). Removing the possessive pronoun makes the sentence more natural.