Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Слишком расплывчато и неуклюже. Нужно отвечать прямо, избегать заполнителей («uh», «mmm»), исправить неправильно использованное слово («write» вместо «ride») и добавить одну-две конкретные детали: когда получила велосипед, где ездили и какие чувства это вызвало. Ответ должен состоять не более чем из 3–4 предложений и содержать связки для плавности.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was very young, but later my mother bought me one when I was ten. She taught me how to ride it in the park near our house, and I still remember feeling proud and free. I really appreciate that because it gave me independence.

提案: Ответ очень короткий и общая причина. Следует расширить мысль одной-двумя конкретными причинами и привести пример или сравнение. Используйте связки (for example, because, such as) и разнообразную лексику, чтобы показать диапазон слов.

例: Yes, I do. Bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and errands. For example, I often see students and office workers cycling to campus or shops, especially in the mornings and evenings, which reduces traffic and is cost-effective.

× No, I didn't, but I have a bicycle. MMM. My mother bought me a bicycle and she, uh, told me how to write uh, and I'm, I really appreciate it.

✓ No, I didn't, but I had a bicycle. My mother bought me a bicycle and she taught me how to ride it, and I really appreciated it.

The student is speaking about childhood (past), so verbs must be in the past tense. 'I have a bicycle' is present; change to 'I had a bicycle' to match 'when you were a child'. 'Told me how to write' is likely a mischoice for the context of bicycles; use 'taught me how to ride' and 'ride it' uses correct verb and object. 'I'm, I really appreciate it' mixes present with past narrative—use past 'I really appreciated it' to keep tense consistent. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout when describing past events and choose verbs that match the action (teach/taught, ride).

× Yes, I do. I think it's true because I see a lot of bikes on my streets.

✓ Yes, I do. I think that's true because I see a lot of bikes on the streets.

'I think it's true' is acceptable but 'that's true' is more natural in this context; change 'my streets' to 'the streets' because 'my streets' is unusual for general observation. The present simple 'I think' and 'I see' correctly express a general present fact, so keep present tense. Suggestion: use 'the streets' for general statements and prefer 'that's true' for natural spoken English.