Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two brief supporting details (e.g., who gave them, how you used them, or a favorite memory). Keep it to no more than five sentences and avoid filler words like "yeah." Use linking words if you add a second idea (for example, "and" or "because").

例: Yes, I had several bikes and a scooter when I was a child. My parents bought my first bike for my sixth birthday, and I loved riding it to the park every weekend. Because of that, I became quite confident cycling on busy streets.

提案: Correct unclear words and organize ideas with linking expressions. Start with a clear opinion sentence ("Yes, bikes are very popular in my country."), then give specific supporting details and reasons (who uses them, when, and why). Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g., "casino") and fix grammar (use plural/singular correctly and prepositions like "in the afternoon"). Limit to up to five sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many children and adults ride them in the afternoons and evenings to visit friends or go to the market. This is partly because cycling is inexpensive and convenient, and there are many safe bike lanes in my city.