Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the tense and make the reply more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one brief supporting detail (how you used it or a memory). Use one or two linking words if adding detail. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that I used to ride around my neighborhood every weekend, and it helped me learn balance and confidence.

提案: Improve grammar (subject–verb agreement and article use), remove fillers (uh, so), and be more specific. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details or examples using linking words (for example, because, such as). Keep vocabulary simple but precise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Indonesia. For example, many people use bicycles for exercise and short trips in cities, and bike-sharing programs have become more common in recent years.

× Yes I do, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense verbs 'do' and 'have' for an action that occurred in the past. The question asked about childhood, so past tense is required. Change 'do' to 'did' and 'have' to 'had' to match past time reference. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× So in the country where I live, Indonesia, uh, bikes is popular in Indonesia because most of people in Indonesia uh, usually take a sport like uh bicycles.

✓ So in the country where I live, Indonesia, bikes are popular because most people in Indonesia usually ride bicycles.

There are multiple problems: 'bikes is' is incorrect subject-verb agreement (plural subject 'bikes' requires 'are'), and the phrase 'most of people' should be 'most people'. 'take a sport like bicycles' is unnatural and ungrammatical; the correct verb is 'ride' with 'bicycles'. Also remove redundant 'in Indonesia'. These changes correct agreement and use more natural collocations.