Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and remove filler words (e.g., “like”). Mention the type or when you received the bike in a single clear sentence.

例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought me a small A2 bike when I was in kindergarten, and I used it throughout primary school. Because I enjoyed outdoor sports, cycling became one of my first regular activities.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons with clearer linking phrases and fewer repetitions. Use correct nouns and singular/plural forms, and avoid vague phrases. State two concise, specific reasons (e.g., infrastructure and culture) and finish with a short conclusion or prediction.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Malaysia. Firstly, the road infrastructure and bike lanes are limited, so cycling between towns can be unsafe. Secondly, public attitudes and commuting habits favor cars and motorbikes. For these reasons, most people prefer motorized transport over cycling.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I like to do sports and bicycles and doing biking is part of like my first a physical activities.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I liked to do sports and ride bicycles; biking was one of my first physical activities.

The sentence refers to past habits, so present simple 'like' is incorrect; use past simple 'liked' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also, 'bicycles and doing biking' is awkward: use 'ride bicycles' and 'biking' as a noun. Remove unnecessary filler words like 'like' and the article 'a' before 'physical activities'. Suggestion: use clear past-tense verbs and concise noun phrases. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× And my dad like bought me A2 bicycle for me when I was like primary schools and also kindergartens.

✓ And my dad bought me an A2 bicycle when I was in primary school and in kindergarten.

The main verb should be past simple 'bought' for a past event (Grammar Problem Type ID 5). Remove the colloquial filler 'like'. Use the indefinite article 'an' before a vowel sound 'A2'. 'Primary schools and also kindergartens' is plural and mismatched with the singular time reference; use singular 'primary school' and 'kindergarten' and include 'in' for correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct articles and prepositions. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× I don't really think so because Malaysians are lacking of like public transport and bicycle is not a common public transport, common transport for residents and also citizens in Malaysia.

✓ I don't really think so because Malaysia lacks sufficient public transport, and bicycles are not a common means of transport for residents and citizens in Malaysia.

'Are lacking of' is incorrect; use 'lacks' or 'are lacking' without 'of' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11 and 14). Also subject should be 'Malaysia' (singular) rather than 'Malaysians are lacking'. 'Bicycle is' should be plural 'bicycles are' to agree with plural noun (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 27). Use 'means of transport' rather than repeating 'public transport'. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns with 'lack', ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose appropriate quantifiers. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× And the main issue is because of the highway in Malaysia is not fully developed yet so it's a very hard to bike from one places to another places.

✓ The main issue is that the highways in Malaysia are not fully developed yet, so it's very hard to bike from one place to another.

Multiple problems: 'because of the highway in Malaysia is not...' is ungrammatical; use 'is that' to introduce a clause (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Highway' should be plural 'highways' or 'the highway system' to match general statement, and verb must agree ('are not' for highways) (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). 'A very hard' is incorrect; use 'very hard' or 'quite difficult' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 / 22). 'From one places to another places' should be singular 'from one place to another' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). Suggestion: restructure sentence with 'The main issue is that...', ensure plural agreement, and use correct comparative expressions. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)