Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically accurate, reduce hesitation, and make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a past-tense topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid filler words like “uh” and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small tricycle with one wheel at the front and two at the back, which helped me learn to balance.

提案: Give a clear, structured response: a direct opinion sentence followed by 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Use correct articles and plural forms, avoid hesitation, and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘for recreation’, ‘commuting’, ‘races’).

例: Yes, bikes are still popular in my country. Many people ride bicycles for recreation or exercise, and you can also see groups training for races on the main roads and parks.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present simple 'do have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions or states completed in the past ('I had').

× The bike has three, uh, wheels.

✓ The bike had three wheels.

Context is past (childhood), so verb should be past 'had' not present 'has'. This also ties to tense consistency rather than plurality. Additionally, no comma is needed before 'wheels'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and remove unnecessary pauses/commas in writing.

× One in front and two at the back.

✓ One wheel in the front and two at the back.

Fragment lacks explicit noun 'wheel' and is a sentence fragment. Add the noun to make it a complete clause. Suggestion: Provide full noun phrases for clarity ('One wheel in the front and two at the back').

× Yes, bikes are still popular in our country, uh, today in present, most of people, umm riding bikes use it as a hobby or as a contest, so I usually see them in a highway or in.

✓ Yes, bikes are still popular in our country. Today, most people ride bikes for hobby or competition, so I usually see them on the highway or in parks.

Multiple errors: tense and phrasing. 'Today in present' is redundant; use 'Today'. 'Most of people' is incorrect quantifier usage; use 'most people'. 'Riding bikes use it' is ungrammatical: subject 'people' should be followed by base verb 'ride' (present simple). 'As a contest' is better 'for competition'. Preposition 'in a highway' is wrong; use 'on the highway'. Also sentence was a run-on; split and reorder for clarity. Suggestions: Use 'most people ride', choose correct prepositions ('on the highway', 'in parks'), avoid redundant phrases.