Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'didn't have' not 'hadn't' or 'hide'), and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'I only rode behind them').

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was too scared of falling. However, most of my friends owned bikes, so I would often ride behind them while they cycled around the neighborhood.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then use linking words to organise reasons (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Secondly'). Avoid repeating the same idea; use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'fuel' not 'fuels', 'cost-effective' instead of 'much more economic'). Provide one specific example or consequence to make the answer concrete.

例: Yes, I think cycling is becoming more popular in my country. Firstly, it helps reduce traffic congestion and air pollution. Secondly, it’s cost-effective since bicycles don’t use fuel. For example, many commuters now cycle short distances to avoid delays and save money on transport.

× No, I hadn't because I was too scared of riding a bike and falling down.

✓ No, I didn't because I was too scared of riding a bike and of falling down.

The student used 'hadn't' (past perfect negative) incorrectly; the question asked about possession in the past ('Did you have'), so the simple past negative 'didn't' is required. Also parallel prepositions improve clarity: 'scared of riding a bike and of falling down.' Use simple past for past habitual or single events and maintain parallel structure.

× So I didn't hide a bike.

✓ So I didn't have a bike.

'Hide' is the wrong verb; context requires 'have' (possession). The sentence should use simple past negative 'didn't have' to match the question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?'. Ensure correct lexical choice and tense.

× But all my friends had a bike and I was all I was only riding just behind their bike.

✓ But all my friends had bikes, and I was only riding just behind them.

The original contains repetition ('I was all I was') and incorrect singular 'bike' after plural friends. Correct structure requires plural 'bikes' and a clearer pronoun reference: 'behind them.' Remove redundant words and fix noun number consistency.

× I think it's getting more and more popular these days because of the car pollution and the problems with the traffic, because it's much cheaper for the bike, because they don't need any fuels and it's much more economic and it's good for the environment too.

✓ I think bikes are becoming more and more popular these days because of car pollution and traffic problems. Bikes are much cheaper because they don't need fuel, they are more economical, and they are good for the environment too.

Multiple issues: tense and subject clarity. Use 'bikes are becoming' or 'are becoming ... popular' for general present development. 'The car pollution' and 'the traffic' are incorrect articles; use 'car pollution' and 'traffic problems.' 'Much cheaper for the bike' is awkward — use 'Bikes are much cheaper.' 'They don't need any fuels' should be 'they don't need fuel' (uncountable) and 'much more economic' should be 'more economical.' Split into two sentences for clarity and correct subject-verb agreement.