Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and remove repetitions. Limit to under five sentences and add a specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, mention how often you rode it or a memorable moment to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I did — I had a green bicycle that my parents bought second-hand and my older sibling passed on to me. I loved it because it was sturdy and comfortable, so I rode it almost every day after school. For example, I used to cycle to my friend’s house every weekend, which helped me feel independent and confident.

提案: Correct grammar, use plural/singular agreement and connect ideas with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons (with linking words) and a brief example to support your opinion. Keep within five sentences and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'short journeys').

例: Absolutely — bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to maintain. Moreover, they are convenient for short journeys in crowded cities, so many people prefer them over cars. For instance, most students and market vendors use bikes to travel short distances every day.

× Yes, I had a green bike when I was a child, easily an old bicycle my parents bought years ago and my sibling used it then passed to me.

✓ Yes, I had a green bike when I was a child; it was an old bicycle my parents bought years ago, which my sibling used and then passed on to me.

Sentence has past-tense content but contains awkward structure and punctuation. Use past simple consistently ('was', 'bought', 'used', 'passed') and connect clauses clearly. Replace comma splice with a semicolon or separate sentences and use 'passed on to me' for natural phrasing.

× I love that bicycle and I I regularly ride the bike Rd.

✓ I loved that bicycle, and I regularly rode it on the road.

Mixes present and past tenses and contains duplicate word 'I' and unclear 'Rd.' Abide by past-tense context ('loved', 'rode'), remove duplicate pronoun, and expand 'Rd.' to 'road' for clarity. Also use pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition.

× Absolutely. Bike are the most popular vehicle in my country.

✓ Absolutely. Bikes are the most popular vehicles in my country.

Subject-verb and noun number mismatch: 'Bike' singular with plural verb 'are' is incorrect. Use plural subject 'Bikes' and plural complement 'vehicles' for agreement and natural phrasing.

× Mostly every family has at least one bike.

✓ Almost every family has at least one bike.

Word choice 'Mostly every' is unidiomatic. Use 'Almost every' to express that the majority of families have at least one bike. This is an article/quantifier style correction (fits article/quantifier guidance).

× Bikes are really affordable and convenient for everyone to use in the short trip and is suitable.

✓ Bikes are really affordable and convenient for everyone to use for short trips and are suitable for that purpose.

Sentence mixes singular 'is' with plural subject 'Bikes' and has awkward phrasing 'in the short trip'. Use plural verb 'are' to match 'Bikes', change 'in the short trip' to 'for short trips', and add 'for that purpose' for clarity.