Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more concise, and add one brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it to the park every weekend, and because of that I became confident cycling on busy paths.

提案: Use correct grammar and plural forms, remove hesitations and repetitions, and give a specific reason or example with a linking word. Begin with a clear opinion sentence and then support it with one precise detail.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many children and adults use them for short trips. For example, I often see groups of students cycling to school in the morning.

× Yes, I have a bike when I am a child and I enjoy.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I enjoyed it.

The speaker refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so present tense 'have' and 'am' are incorrect. Use past simple 'had' and 'was'. Also 'enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed' to match. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference; for past events use past simple verbs.

× I enjoy driving the bicycle and I really love it.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bicycle and I really loved it.

Because the speaker is describing past experiences, gerund 'driving' is acceptable but the main verbs should be past tense. Additionally, native speakers usually say 'ride a bicycle' or 'ride my bike' rather than 'drive the bicycle'. Suggestion: use 'ride' for bicycles and ensure verb tense consistency (past simple for past events).

× Yes, it's very popular because I see many, I see many child riding a bicycle and there it's a lot.

✓ Yes, they are very popular because I see many children riding bicycles there; there are a lot of them.

The question asks about general popularity in the country (present tense is fine), but the student mixed singular/plural and incorrect pronouns. 'Child' should be plural 'children'; 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles'. 'It's very popular' is awkward referring to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they are very popular'. Also 'there it's a lot' is ungrammatical; use 'there are a lot of them' or 'there are many' instead. Suggestion: ensure subject number matches verb and use correct plural forms and natural expressions for quantity.

× I see many child riding a bicycle

✓ I see many children riding bicycles

Count noun 'child' must be plural when used with 'many' (use 'children'). Similarly, 'a bicycle' should be plural after 'many' if referring to multiple children. Suggestion: use plural nouns with quantifiers like 'many' and match determiners accordingly.

× and there it's a lot. It's a lot, uh, riding a bicycle.

✓ There are a lot of people riding bicycles there.

The original fragment is disfluent and lacks a clear subject-verb structure. 'It's a lot' is vague and ungrammatical in this context. Rephrase to a complete sentence with subject 'there are a lot of people' and clarify the activity 'riding bicycles'. Suggestion: form complete sentences with a clear subject and verb and avoid filler repetition.